Black Poetry : darren

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Aug 27, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    how come nobody’s saying anything?
    it’s thanksgiving and darren is in a wheelchair
    got shot selling drugs on the corner
    everybody is acting like it was a regular accident

    how come nobody’s saying anything?
    your son was selling drugs on the street and got shot
    you all are acting like he’s got a case about to settle
    disability, workers comp or some such ****

    how come nobody’s saying anything?
    there was a breakdown in family structure here
    you all turned a blind eye when he walked out the door
    don’t give me that mantra about how you can’t do nuthin’ with that boy!

    how come nobody’s saying anything?
    serving him his food, laughing and joking with him
    like his *** didn’t need a whupping then
    and his *** still needs a whupping now

    how come nobody’s saying anything?
    when Darren STILL says he’s goin’ out
    throwing on his designer clothes
    where in the hell do you people think he’s going?
    to the corner store all night long in a **** wheelchair?

    oh my God! you all are my family!
    i can’t believe i’m related to you people
    why am i standing at the table and screaming
    why are you looking at me like i am crazy
    how come nobody’s saying anything!!?
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    DEEP!!!!!

    I am loving your poetic prose, my sista! This is awesome work. Thank you for this portrait...and the feelings it evoked within me.

    Keep it coming!

    alyce
     
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    One word DENIAL...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    denial indeed can't they see da reality
    u has put forth the truth & reality da
    wake up call is a rude awakening.....nice flow poet !!
     
  5. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for your feedback...i try to paint pictures with my words.
     
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    i haven't seen pieces quite like this.

    very vivid, very tyte..

    poetic eyes are now on you
    jh.
     
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    We like to burry our heads in the sand
    It is easier that way
    Don’t have to take a stand
    Don’t have to make enemies
    With me I do not consider myself a big mouth
    But my family always knows right or wrong
    We are family and I gotz there back right or wrong
    But after we stand back to back and fight against all odds together
    I am gonna tell them just how foul
    Their **** may be
    and if we family
    we still gonna be

    I only lye to my enimies
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    although this story didn't happen in my home...it is a true story...I just put it into words...
     
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    red.


    ...the title of this peace has been calling my name
    for days... :) & as usual you didn't disappoint!!

    i think i've told you before... but your work is so
    real to me... it reads like a story that i don't want
    to end or somthin'. :) (i ain't g'on start ramblin')

    i enjoyed it... much!

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Emotional!

    Reas
     
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