Black Poetry : Damaged

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  1. tdogg

    tdogg Active Member MEMBER

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    She looks in the reflection
    to ask for a meaning to it all
    for it was not all her fault
    for the failures she caused.
    She did not ask
    to born of this memory
    a nightmare to be fused
    inside her head
    a lifetime of misery.
    Voices beginning to speak
    while pointing thier fingers
    her mind is weiry
    fragile and very weak.
    What simple task
    could cause such shame
    leaving a trace of bitterness and pain.
    Her spirit is given
    no cause for delight
    and her souls existence
    a tattered sight.
    Her hands are filled
    with salted tears
    for the sound of laughter
    no one hears.
    The soles of her feet
    are no longer
    soft to touch
    for the journey
    they've carried
    has made them as such.
    With the force of air
    she is thrown down
    her body tiredly
    lays on the ground.
    She rises only to fall
    for the path
    that she has chosen
    she cannot recall.
    For each moment
    she secretly lives
    guilt is thought she cannot forgive.
     
  2. suddenpassion

    suddenpassion Banned MEMBER

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    wow, this was beautiful,.felt like a read out of my diary..i love this!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was so nicely pose'd made me feel fuzzy
    i enjoyed this read here flow on tdogg
     
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    This is so tragic and so beautiful. Wow!
     
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    my goodness
    the deep vibes
    of your scribe
    is heart felted
    yes indeed
    Peace
     
  6. tdogg

    tdogg Active Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Rich, and gempis, Bluewater and suddenpassion for your support.
     
  7. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mang.... this was so nice and beautiful.... felt like you was writing about me.....
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i enjoyed this it was beautiful but so sad
    much love,
    -story
     
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    Wow! That was wonderful. For once (in a long time) I am speechless. Are you peeking into my life somehow? :grouphug:
     
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