Black Poetry : daily commute

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  1. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m thinking quietly today
    In the midst of a crowd
    Watching commuters traverse
    And wonder of their thoughts;

    I sit along on the train
    Staring out the window
    Wondering if I shall see
    My future walking by;

    I enjoy my life alone as I
    Avoid lonely for patience
    Keeps me quiet and “at
    Peace” keeps me at bay;

    I see a woman alone
    Grasping her purse as she
    Awaits the train constantly
    Surveying her environment;

    Her beauty intrigues me
    But it’s not her outer shell
    For I sense the beauty I
    See dwells deep within;

    I watch as she enters the train
    Meticulously moving through the
    Crowd and by chance she looks
    My way as she sits across from me;

    Her aura is sweet as it
    Dances with my intrigue
    Leaving me guessing about
    This pearl in a bed of stones;

    I begin to imagine her with me
    Wlaking through the mall holding
    Tightly to my arm as we stare into
    The glass display at our future;

    My dreams are gone and now I’m
    saddened for I see doubt and fears
    laughing at me, reminding me that
    I’m not worthy of beauty such as she;

    yet my peace is returned when I
    stare her way only to discover
    her staring at me as she smiles,
    pulls her hair back to reveal…

    A cross.


    "Truly I say to you, whoever says to this mountain, 'Be taken up and cast into the sea,' and does not doubt in his heart, but believes that what he says is going to happen, it will be granted him.
    ~Mark 11:23

    But he must ask in faith without any doubting, for the one who doubts is like the surf of the sea, driven and tossed by the wind.
    ~James 1:6
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If any man would follow me let him take up his cross.....Have faith and take up your cross.....she just may have been sent your way.
     
  3. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks Bishop...i know you can always see through the words

    dnommo
     
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    such beautiful pictures you paint
    thank you for this

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this piece is simply, beautiful even the second time around, my nubian kind. yes, indeed...it is.
     
  6. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Destee and Lister,

    thanks you for the read...
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dnommo,

    all i can say is ... nice.

    one love,blak
     
  8. dnommo

    dnommo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    blak,

    thanks bro'. i wanted to revisit this one...

    :toast:
     
  9. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    d.....

    This one sits in my heart for obvious reasons ;)
    I am glad that you have decided to re-visit this peace
    This one brings your friendship back to me

    *subway-dreams*

    :wave:
     
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