Khasm13 : da jazz between the lines....(bounced off of royal jazz)

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    notes of unquestioned harmony drift between the smoke
    hitting my central nervous system harder then the rum and coke
    the vibes need no microphone cause the notes saturate and soak
    my subconcious, even being fully woke...in a zone...i'm taken somewhere else
    by the tenor saxaphone's...vibrato which reverberates in my head like church bells
    the muted trumpet yells while the drummer sticks screams
    over ad lib licks and high hat kicks tighter then worn out jeans
    speed it up to double time with the bongo's bangin like a driver thas blind
    complex melodious melodies marinate in my mind
    the piano fingers a song for my father while couples sip wine
    and old cats inhale cigars...this is too much flavor to ever be contained in jars
    the acoustics are boosted up by the dimensions of the busy bar
    joy and pain are strummed repetitively by the stoned bass guitar
    none of the players are well known superstars
    but through their lips and fingers i feel lifes loves and lifes scars
    the song crescendos as the precussion crashes the cymbals
    sounding like broken windows...maybe it's the previous blazed indo
    that has me open like 10 h0es...i don't know
    as the accents of the last song slows...i feel a completion to this prose
    while in my soul the beat goes...
    on
    ...&
    ......on
    .........&
    ............on
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "this is too much flavor to ever be contained in jars" This line captured my feeling about this piece, your phrases have so much depth to them, you feel as though you are...there. Tight piece brotha.
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW. this has a whole new flava on it's own


    "the acoustics are boosted up by the dimensions of the busy bar
    joy and pain are strummed repetitively by the stoned bass guitar
    none of the players are well known superstars
    but through their lips and fingers i feel lifes loves and lifes scars"

    That's beautiful right there. Some original spoken word. you were very articulate in this poem. The acoustics, the bass, yes it does go on...


    Peace out...loved it...
     
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    wow what a splash of twist off the Royal Jazz this took
    on a whole new blaze brutha
     
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    Love the intelligence in this. Great rhymin, Khas.
     
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    Like music...

    <fades in>

    this poem displays an adept use of rhythm and rhyme. Flows like music. Each line forming it's own melody that accents and expands the line before and the lines that come after.

    Excellent Work!

    keep the words moving


    peace&1luv


    <fades out>
     
  7. MzBlkAngel

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    *clapping* this was one of your best it took me and i loved it
    the vibe the style my brother you got it...just take me inside your poetry i love the setting indeed....flow on loving it!!!!!! :luvu:
     
  8. Khasm13

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    thanks fam....
    and most of all...thanks prize fo da inspiration...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    Nice

    On point, Khasm13!... I must say I appreciate how you feel each sound. I know these feelings, and it could not have been expressed any better
     
  10. Khasm13

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    a blast from da past...

    one love
    khasm
     
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