Khasm13 : da basket case...

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    working 9 till 6
    6 days out of 7
    eating lunch at the 7
    11
    he pays 11
    dollars a day
    for parking across da bay
    this cat works as a pawn broker
    in da local pawn shop
    a tabacco pipe smoker
    he sells cheap imitation watches at 20 a pop
    he also sells dreams
    like bottomless vials of crack
    to appease crack fiends
    and love potions
    to keep his true intentions unseen
    that your soul is da offering instead of green
    binded by the devilsh deceiptive durdy deal dean.............

    he sold this one man a drink to make his d!ck grow
    for 37 dollars...but what he didn't know
    that he was on his way to the 73rd level of hell
    him and this stupid @ss house negro...........

    then he sold this woman some lotion
    to make her skin young again
    the chaos set in motion
    gave this man a snake-like sinister yellow toothed grin......

    he sold this gurl mega supa weight loss pills
    so she could fit a size 6
    the mark of the beast 666
    ravished her soul at will and left her body in da sticks.....

    then he sold this boy some game gum
    spit'n hellified game lookin like a bum
    but when da devil came afta him
    he had no game to run cause he was dun.....


    doing durdy dirt....is a hard days work
    but afta work...this cat leaves da gig with a smirk
    knowing dat when humans hurt he's always on da alert
    he's got ill job security
    from man's tyranny
    patrons of this store soul turn withery
    look in the mirror and there he'll be
    guiding you down the path of treachery
    wraiths watch while you fall steadily
    heavenly powers have to stand back and watch
    cause it was your choice.......and your guardian angel was not ready.....
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man dis here
    really took my mental off
    and came back under wisdom
    very nice flow
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this
    it was like a
    was trap
    wanting to
    just read and
    readtight drop
    flow on.....
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Always someone who profits from another's misery, seems like this could be an ongoing story, Khasm. Part 2 perhaps?
     
  5. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    preach my brother
    you ran this down
    in a tight form
    amazing...sad piece
    wonderful read
    deep
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  6. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    thanks fam....
    thanks steven king for this one.....;)
    one love
    khasm
     
  7. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Taken back

    Wow...this one took me back
    Like $$RICH$$... this one took my mental thoughts into a reeeeeal deep zone!
    Way to let the floE glow
    oh....
    Steven King..aint that Hatte Bell King's oldest son..you know...Lil Ray Ray ..with the gold grill....lol...
    jus kiddin...I know who steven kings is :wink:
     
  8. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bro this was like a story indeed I loved the flow and the content... :read:
    Mad flavor indeed :yo:
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brother...I love your craft... :bowdown:

    This was "High Score"...

    Teaching "Deep" lessons...with such imagery
    and creativity...

    Excellent piece...

    Somebody better wake up and listen...or rather open their eyes
    "their mind's eye" and see evil at work...

    Peace
     
  10. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    "cause it was your choice"

    this was very nice..(but that aint the word)
    liked it..
    and the lines of yours above i put in quotes..
    "cause it was your choice"
    ring...like a loud clang..

    nice...thanks
     
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