Black Poetry : [email protected] Girl...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Jan 23, 2004.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    cant work up the words to speak the deepest passion
    that lives inside this body of mine, the burning is ever lasting
    my goal in life is to work up the courage to show you
    if I cant become one with you, at least get to know you

    ive had them all in shape, size, and shade
    but I have never been this deep, 6ft deep into a grave
    cuz I feel like living isnt possible when you cross my path
    my friends call me crazy, not knowing... and all I can do is laugh

    you're like a white rose surrounded by a field of red roses
    blowing with the wind causing me to lose my mind and focus
    I dont know why u deafen me with ur voice and blind me with ur beauty
    or why i know ur schedule like it was mine, better yet like its my duty

    Im falling... falling... falling into your seductive aura
    It goes beyond your appearance man... even tho I really, really wanna explore ya
    Your sweeter than sugar, but as tangy as tart
    not only do you grab me your style, yo you grab me with your heart

    I watch you... no I literally watch you to see where your head's at
    And i can see you look for more, not just for where the bread's at
    Im a fene... a love fene... nobody has ever got me so addicted
    I wanna inject your love into my life n let it control the way I live it

    But if I cant find the words... not unless you turn into a paper and a pen
    I guess I should just... **** I dont know... um I guess work to be a friend?
    LOL... sh*t girl, I dont even think Im good at doing that....
     
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    Doing your thing :bomb: and droppin some real ones! :geek:
     
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    That's cool man. We've all been in that kind of situation, and that tells it all. Cool poem.
     
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    You are just droppin' all kinds of love every where today! Much love to you keep it comin'.
     
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    my goodness, someone has sure been dimin' on the flows the last twenty-fo. this one's even hotter than the last one. I like this line very much:

    But if I cant find the words... not unless you turn into a paper and a pen

    She must be alla that and a boxa rockets if YOU can't find the words to step. hee hee...
    But I hope you do, girl. Sounds like it's most def worth a try.

    :heart:
     
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    Sounds like someone has been intoxicated by a love, this was so smooth.
     
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    do your thing, your poems are so captivating, i enjoy reading them
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sounds like...

    the love bug done bit the hell out of you.

    passion is a powerful thang!

    nice write


    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a flamin' piece you wrote........this piece was jazzy
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall

    you guys are exactly right, im tyte over this girl i know... i mean a huge crush, but yo its a complicated sit. so im just here...u know?
     
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