Poetry Critiques : Cry for Life

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  1. Buttercup

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    Don't you hear my soft wimper of pain.
    How can you sleep when you hear the anger in my cry.
    You can't stop the terror in my whine!
    Why oh why must you want to hurt me!
    If you can feel me spuirm, am I not alive?
    You sense life, I must be real.
    If I am growing, I must be a living being.
    Then why do you choose to take breath from me?
    I wouldn't choose to go like this.
    This isn't right, I can't even resist!
    I have feelings, I just can't express them.
    I have a heart, does it not beat?
    Don't take my innocence, just let me be!
    I AM ALIVE! YOU HEAR ME, I AM ALIVE!
    Please don't take my freedom away from me.
    Again I say, how can you say I am not real.
    How can you possibly know how I feel.
    I would never choose to die like this.
    Mom please list, I WANT TO EXIST!
    This is my cry for life......just let me live.
     
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    A cry well heard this was very nice and heartfelt i wouldn't change a thing
     
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