Poetry Critiques : Crown for Abused Children

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  1. HSF Moe

    HSF Moe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is the crown for a ring sonnet series i wrote a few years back. the final poem is an acrostic, and check out the first letter (for those who might have missed it):

    a Crown for Abused children

    invisible are the sinless sufferers, which kill our souls

    tears stain unwavering, unbroken chains

    keeps my heart heavy holding darkened skies

    invoking God fails to quell the pain

    like closed ears, closed eyes, closed mouths, closed minds

    lessons betray me: “Vengeance is mine”

    struck by the momentum of a downhill ball

    overpowered by a disease that affects us all

    until i am dead, i'll make you tall

    rather then cower being defenseless and small

    stand strong, escape and close your eyes

    Optimistic Tomorrows hear your call

    unable to cross without paying tolls

    leave this place by plane, train, or shopping mall

    sever those ties; it kills our souls
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done
     
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