Black Poetry : ::Crossing Paths::

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  1. Sincerely Serena

    Sincerely Serena New Member MEMBER

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    Had an epiphany of you & me,
    The string was cut & I lucked up cause it's your eulogy
    Constant pain as well as inside but the look on my face caught you by surprise
    Sumn you didn't expect,,
    me not giving you no respect
    My Body language & demeanor told it all
    I saw you before it happened
    Certain principles you were lacking
    But I was down with the bs & all
    Tf was I thinking,,Tf was I drinking
    Lost myself in the woods & this really got me tweakin
    Overthink ya overthinking then overthink some more
    Then it dawned on me,,finally
    my heart don't want you no more......
     
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    Sincerely Serena ... :toast1: :toast1: :toast1:

    oh my gosh ... i was overthinking before i got to the word overthinking!

    i mean i actually thunk ... what da hizzle is going on here ... :lol:

    moving so fast in just a few lines ... like a roller coaster ride

    if folk don't want to think too much ... they better not read you

    beautiful ... thanks for sharing ... :bowdown:

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    Sincerely Serena New Member MEMBER

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    So you really like it?!
     
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    YESSSSSS!!! ... great work! ... :score:

    Keep it coming ... please! :)

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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    amazing...the growth spurts we have...after crossing paths...even with the worst of the worst...they manage to increase our worth...to expand our growth...even while going for the rope-a-dope...we hope...for a better life; a better way...hope our crossing paths brings forth a better day.

    better days are coming your way, Sincerely Serena. Welcome to the Playground.
     
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    Al D We become that which we repeatedly do.. PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Sister Sincerely Serena, You got me thinking because I'm trying to figure out whether the epiphany was the relationship being severed ( the cut string) which produced the eulogy ( a writing of endearment ) of something that could have been or maybe that you wanted it to be, but in spite of it all can not? Beautiful piece!!!
     
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    You hit it right on the head! Basically a relationship being severed
     
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