Black Poetry : Critical Analysis and Exegesis, by Eldred P. Walker, Night Shift Maintenance.

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  1. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    .....taken from a actual conversation.

    Uncle, I have this poetry with you in mind..
    I want to show you my metaphors
    And fluidity of line....


    "Boy, you aint said a **** thang....
    Using them big words and weirdo slang...
    Give me a poem that fights and bites..
    Something like Mr. Leroi Jones would write."


    "I need one that cant stop, dont stop, wont stop.
    Something that scats and swings like bebop...
    I need something that moves my soul,
    Have me sweating at midnight going "Whoaaa"


    But Uncle, I work within the bounds of
    What is aliterative and formal....

    "Yea, yea, yea, shaddup and give me something normal"

    "Give me something I can understand,
    Talk to me direct, cause Im a simple man.
    Dont wanna hear bout the light of yo soul, right now.
    It's time to party, boy..show me how"

    Er..po me a drank..."

    "Give me something that vibes and swings..
    Give me royalty, like Duke or Prince, or 'Reatha the Queen
    "Nature, Liberation of yo Soul....yea, yea, yea...all that's true...
    But I want something spicy, like Tito Puente or Cecila Cruz"



    "See, the problem with you poets today....
    Cain't call the sky blue, gotta say "azure grey"...
    And did'nt azure grey live down on Monroe Skreet?
    ****, forgot what I was talkin bout...oh yea, ya poetry."


    "Now I'se got no problem with big words and edumacation, that' true,
    But sometimes you gotta adjust to the crowds and who ya talkin to.


    But Uncle, surely you dont mean I dilute my work?
    "Boy, you aint made a **** dime...
    And that's bout all it's worth."

    "Now po me a drank."



    (c)2005 dennis lee
     
  2. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was good and real!
    I really enjoyed this!:blowkiss: :blowkiss:
    Thank you for sharing!:blowkiss:
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i liked this alot:)
     
  4. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow this is like ease dropping on a intimate conversation thanks for letting us enter your world. flow on poet.:kiss1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed this, the realism of it. Sorta reminds me of conversations I would have with my grandmother years ago. She would tell you, I knew you when, in a second, lol.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte joint i was all into this one
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was hot poet
    From the edumacation to the skreets
    The deliver was on point
    Much Love Poet
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I thought this was hot keep the poetry comin...
    :heart:
    -story
     
  9. kemetkind

    kemetkind Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man this is classic, this has to get published somewhere! Good stuff...
     
  10. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    tyte scribe poet...u said somethin right chere...

    one love
    khasm
     
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