Black Poetry : Crimson Streets

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by BioRhythm, May 24, 2005.

  1. BioRhythm

    BioRhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thunder shakes the earth
    lightening splits the sky
    and rain falls....

    A fierce downpour
    cleansing our bloody streets
    John's memory washed away
    his tears and pain forgotten
    Jane's life torn astray
    her torment, her agony misbegotten

    The rain clenses our impure streets
    traces of ill-will, none remain
    as the world forgets our tortured agony
    no reminder of shayla's pain.

    And amidst reverbrating windows
    and shaking limbs
    the rain cleanses the earth's streets
    yet like hollow lines
    intwined in impure hearts and darkened souls
    the grime is her to stay

    So as I see bloody hands clensed
    and I see living memory washed away
    I expect no change in men this day
    For man won't change....
    till the price he's willing to pay.
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi BioRhythm
    very creative drop
    only the outside can be cleanse
    point made
    today there may be no change
    Only Today
    Many blessing to our tomorrows
    May they not be filled with these sorrow
    Peace and Love

     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was heavy yet felt deeply
    tyte created flow
     
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    Sodwn2earth Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice. We seem inspired these days don't we? :cool:
     
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    blood beneath the clean streets...
    indeed
    nice rhythm and meter...
    stong emotion and tone
    greath imagery and
    thought provoking stanzas

    nice work poet
    keep writing

    Sage
     
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