Black Poetry : criminal thinking

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  1. OldSoul

    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Criminal Thinking

    Recently thinking secretly
    Guarding my thoughts like
    A squirrel with his nuts in a tree
    I wondered what it would be like
    To think thoughts of free-dom to be.
    I don't know where this place is
    Or what to do to get there
    All I know is that thinking
    Is against the law
    And my mind is a criminal to me.
    My life is a sentence with no parole
    No bond no bail
    An invisible jail
    I can escape if I turn in my soul.
    In my secretly criminal thinking
    I'm alone, an army of one
    Plotting and planning down in the night
    As I imagine others did before me
    Back before ideas were taught
    And thoughts were caught
    Life couldn't be bought
    Back when these words were free.
    I live in fear of being discovered
    That you or he or she will see
    That I've been thinking
    And not believing
    All that we are taught to see.
    I know that you will betray me
    As thoughtlaws force you to do
    You'll lead the investigation
    And help with the torture too.
    You'll do it because you believe
    That criminal thinking must end
    Citizen demands that you must kill me
    And scatter my thoughts in the wind.

    --02-03-04
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    whoa, this is way deep. diggin on every line, oldsoul
     
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    i'm with ya old soul...
    in history class
    i sat in da back write'n raps
    much props on da secret thinking....
    one love
    khasm
     
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    like this
    deep scribe
    flow on
     
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    Nice...

    Diggin it.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt all of this flow deep too
    flow on
     
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    Unearthing gems...
    by our poet of the week...

    Flow on poet...
    You stand in the light this week...
    Sage
     
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    Oldsoul, your avatar speaks volumes of your poetry, you are truly hot and on fire!! Keep flowin poet!
    Much love and respect:)
     
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    but it shows a path way that reverses
     
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