Black Poetry : crib talk

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Derrick Jay, Apr 25, 2002.

  1. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    motions soft
    affectionate
    feeling soo safe
    warm
    caressed by eternal love
    undeniable
    feeds me
    nourishes my soul
    keeps me from going astray
    in many ways
    guiding light upon my path
    as crawl begins to walk
    each footstep progressing
    under a watchful eye
    catching my falls
    wiping the tears i cry
    at night
    full and happy
    not a care in the world
    but for the woman
    outside of my crib
    i am her greatest miracle
    greatest fear
    and greatest hope
    for a better tomorrow
    when i grow up
    but now
    i'm content to receive her care
    knowing that mommy will be there
    i close my eyes
    and sleep the good sleep...
     
  2. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A delightful piece!

    I really enjoyed this delightful piece, riddled with metphors and structured like a sonnet!
    You have a broad range of styles, build on it!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE:D
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis kinda talk is what everybody wanna here....tyght flow man!
    crib chating wit my baby!!
     
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    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like dis heah!!!
    Very nice peace
    E
     
  5. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    remembering that time before we found out life is what our parents told us it would be...and then some

    thanx for the reads fam...

    One,
    Derrick Jay
     
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