Khasm13 : creature feature...

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  1. Khasm13

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    look under the bleachers
    come'n thru the speakers
    dang...he just mauled the gym teacher
    and the sunday school preacher
    oh ish...it's da creature feature
    he'll batter and beat ya
    tenderize your meat on da bones and eat ya
    delete ya...of the face of the earth
    first things firsts...he comes from the deep sea submersed
    now he's released from his mystic acient curse
    ready to see many mellons burst
    from san deigo to bensonhurst
    his scaly skin sends messages to his external back fin
    while evolution alows him to mend with a devilish grin
    his peaceful solice is at an end
    at one time he took on 10 men
    and all 10 men could not fend
    off his blows...far from soft
    the color of moss...bodies get tossed
    by this oceanic faust
    death is the cost...for being at the wrong place at the wrong time
    an unsolved 187 night time crime
    didn't steal a dime...just missing body parts he chose to dine
    and he sips alley water like cheap wine
    you can't stop him with a nine
    not even with an ak-47...cause your bones he'll grind
    and stop you dead in....your tracks on the pipeline
    peep da signs...cause his destruction flows with da slime
    he's lurkin in da shadows...so the time you thought you had to unwind
    is gone...and so are pieces of your mind
     
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    man u took it to the pad deep here ..
    now u know i'm all up in dis piece tyte write khasm
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    khasm i likes!!!!
    thas all i can say
    tight write
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    You know when I was young, much, there used to be something on tv called creature double feature. Any how, this sounded spooky like that. So, when are you going to start making some super hero comics or something?
     
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    I've said it before but you're not only a poet
    but a "Creative Writer"...you create these
    images that are off the chain and you mos def'
    know how to create an eerie feeling...

    Very entertaining piece...
     
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    like i said
    in another thread
    my brother
    your skills are somewhere over the rainbow

    just keep writing, cause you bring it everytime

    "look under the bleachers
    come'n thru the speakers
    dang...he just mauled the gym teacher
    and the sunday school preacher
    oh ish...it's da creature feature"

    you just too much...
     
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    I'm not skurred
    I'm not skurred
    I'm not skurred
    I'm not skurred
    :look:
    :eek:
    :eeek:
    really...I'm not :eeek:
    hehehe
    but you do have a way of making the mind meet you in the deep dark recesses of the unknown :look:
    but...
    I'm still not skurrred :D ;)
     
  8. Khasm13

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    HAHAHAHAHA...:lol:
    ya'll are too kind to me...
    i know sometimes my ish is out there...yes indeed...
    YEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSS INDEEDDDDDDDDDDDDD...
    thanks for giving solice to a sometimes derranged mind
    cause i sometimes do have thoughts of a creature feature sneak'n up from behind
    he's not kind with his destructive enzymes used on da prey he finds
    i'm...not gonna be the one caught cause i was taught to avoid his onslaught
    he lives on borrowed time not bought victims screams are for naught when battles are fought
    i ought to chill before i'm the one sought for speakin da damage thas rought
    i peep him on top of that building thas haught...
    *scamper'n* :lol:

    one love
    khasm
     
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    wooooh! It's like that scarey movie
    you watch. You know your'e scurred
    but you just can't stop watching!

    Your style is so enchanting! I just
    can't stop reading you!

    Great scribe Brother Khasm13!!!!!!
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    off the chain

    This is tight!
    Man u need to write a book 4 real!
     
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