Black Poetry : crashin' my truck

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Oct 7, 2003.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so i put in a good day at work
    one of those hard focused days
    where the pile gets smaller
    and gets bigger
    and gets smaller
    but focused all day long
    no lunch
    just a **** slim fast
    cause...yunno, i swear i'm gonna make it to the gym and
    be the baddest ***** in town
    but
    now work is over and i'm in my suv
    headed home
    i wanna be in the fast lane
    you know
    i wanna be in the left
    cause i wanna get home to my seeds
    and i wanna get online
    and i wanna feel the flow and the vibe
    and i'm missin' my mama
    she just died last month
    and can't i get into this lane fast enough
    and suddenly a red light
    and suddenly a black suv
    and suddenly i'm all crashed into the back
    and you tell me
    what was on my mind
    crashing my truck in downtown newark
    where it takes 30 minutes for 911 to arrive
    and my girl dee
    she was gettin' off work said she's on her way by my side
    and my truck is all messed up
    how i crash my truck?
    how the ****
    did i crash my truck
    my Qx4 looks like a Qx what?
    and now i know my man gonna be pissed
    we just paid off this *****
    and all cause i wanted to be in the fast lane
    and was feelin' a little mama pain
    i swear sometimes it doesn't end
    i'm sitting here after just makin' amends
    with my man at home
    and now i'm sittin' here all alone
    and my truck leakin' some green ****
    is somebody tryin' to tell me sumthin?
    i said
    is somebody tryin to tell me sumthin?
    or is nobody sayin' nuthin
     
  2. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It couldn't been worse!

    My dear sister , I would never cut in on your verse.
    And I swear I didn't even get a chance to rehearse.
    But , I just got through talkin about amazin grace, nobody came to see what I said...so in stead I will say to you...
    Be encouraged, your intentions are good.
    You working, responsible trying to do what you should.
    It could have been worse...
    You could have been getting picked up
    by an ambulance, or even worse a hearse...Now I know that may not comfort you , but as Momma looked down with love, she made sure the Angels kept you safe and no harm came to that lovely face!
    You could have been broke up all over the place. (LIKE ME!)
    (Go back and read my piece "THE CAR WRECK")
    I know you are going to be in a mess, nobody likes to have a wreck...but it's an accident a random occurrence, something that happens no matter what! I know you are waiting...but there is no but!
    It could have been worse...it was not!
    _______________________
    May God keep you is my prayer.
    And my condolensces on your loss!
    Blessings On Your House!
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was felt and i say to u
    good ya still walking through
    i feel u
    sometime we have to just slow
    down and stay to da right....
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sorry fo the truck
    but glad your ok...
    like ya flow
     
  5. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    cindy - thank you, hopefully i won't be goin' anywhere for a while.
    msluciousb - feedback from u is never a verse cut in! chile please, thank you for the uplifting words.
    rich - ha! yeah, i'll try to stay towards the right
    mzblkangel - than you
     
  6. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    girl...I hear you...had a couple accidents myself
    grateful I survived...but thinking back on what
    was on my mind during those times...is even
    more intense...

    I feel you on this...
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow
    feeling you here
    many blessing
    Peace
     
  8. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you know what...i could just see this whole thing as i was reading, the way you detailed everything was off the hook...of course it's probably not like i imagined but still...i'm glad your truck was the only thing hurt though...you made a tight flow out of a sucky situation. much love
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah I gots to second True Love it was like riding along wit ya I was like :eeek: whoa! :)
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i third them...everybody taking my words darnnit!:mad::)
     
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