Black Poetry : crash

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MORE, Jul 9, 2003.

  1. MORE

    MORE Banned MEMBER

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    crash
    throw the wine glass
    against the wall

    get another one
    then give u a call
    pissed than a ******
    cause u playing games

    acting like u got no feelings
    its so insane

    friends all involved
    causing mad rifts
    causing indirect pain
    causing us to drift
    this oppourtuntiy comes
    once in a life time
    every 1000 years
    its my and its your time

    are u gonna let me walk out your life?
    cuz some bullish happned classified
    as trife
    how u gonna act like u don't know me
    fell asleep when i was crying
    the ish gets deep

    and even tho your nuccas
    was tryna to get in my womb
    i counteracted all that, hoping
    u'd find out soon
    no matter what im crab grabbing
    not gonna let go
    rather sting myself to deaf
    then lose u
    like the scorpio does

    drinking myself into the unknown
    you was my partner, my friend
    now apart we have grown
    but im willing to take another chance
    cause i know, if i lose you
    where in the hell else would i go????
    there's nothing else to do?
     
  2. Clio_the_Muze

    Clio_the_Muze Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Interesting.... this poem reminds me of a guy I dated once, especially the part,

    "cause i know, if i lose you
    where in the hell else would i go????
    there's nothing else to do?"

    That is exactly the way I felt, but I learned that the only place to go after him was up...
     
  3. Khasm13

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    i like this...
    sometimes relationships do crash
    i hope that this one wasn't totalled
    peace
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice flow here
    it takes me back in time ...
     
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    I like this flow right here...kinda like a peek into the past
     
  6. angelicsage

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    This was raw but with a deep air of emotional pain...Nice flow.
    Feeling this piece.
     
  7. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi More,

    This was a very emotional piece!! Very deep!! I can relate!!

    Peace to you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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