Khasm13 : cracked tooth in da phone booth...part II

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    man...i wanna scold this mofo big otis
    scotty says that it hopeless...he's untoucable like the pope is
    but that durdy rat has my drugs and money
    so i have to focus
    i went to the spot and saw the damage dun
    police tape surrounded the building
    like abstinence surrounds a nun
    I looked at the edge of the tape
    and i saw what looked like broken pieces of a gun
    that mofo shattered a gun?
    what the blood clot happened at my spot?
    this frickin strongman must think he's the king of camelot
    i'ma be sure to play connect the dots with venom bullets shots
    cause big o doesn't have the motts
    i do...let me focus before i continue
    i need to check out my man the seer sammy woo
    he'll know what to do
    just then scotty woke up in da back of the car seeing stars
    get up man,we're going to check out vision(sammy woo)
    i'ma clap with him before i make my decision....

    sammy woo
    hmmm...what do we have here?
    a man that walks around with no fear
    i sense his strong pressence...he's very near
    he is not your peer...his aura is mystic and very old
    something...someone else has his shell in a hold
    he's possesed by an aged demon whose soul is cold
    in search of rich's and gold
    his modus operandi is to take charge and be bold
    a sucker for showing out in dusty streets
    since the days of wool robes and bare feets
    he's a proud spirit...prone to ugly defeats
    all u have to do is cover him in blessed sheets...
    for that info your bill is 50 bucks and two baby car seats...
    i just had twins man...;)


    after i recieved this info
    me and scotty saw that getting our ish back
    was gonna be fundamental
    and i was gonna be sure to be
    far from gentle...

    to be continued....
     
  2. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA dont hurt the game like that, nice drop
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Seems like the heat is going to get a lot hotter. I'm still all up in this, wanting to know more.
     
  4. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Djeeeeeez!!! :lol: :lol:
    Read part one and now part two...
    ...and man, you are full of fantasy.... :uzi:
    this reads like a weekly comic...
    looking forward to the next item!!!!!
    greets
    moham
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    another star post bruh ! loving it
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok wheres the book at my brother....nice drop
    waiting on pt 3
     
  7. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Khasm...
    I never seem to lose
    the anticipation of what you
    bring to the table...
    Love the intrigue in this piece
    and especially the metaphor
    in the second half...


    there were so many parts to this
    that caught my attention and made me
    think..."that was fresh" :wink: lol...
    seriously...the age old demon line and
    modus operandi and wool robes and bare feet...
    Very,very nice touch...great imagery and creativity...

    Anxiously anticipating the continuation...
    Sage
     
  8. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice Drop. I liked the same part AngelicSage quoted. The part about needing two car seats. :haha: Very funny twist, to a great poem and venture.

    " need to check out my man the seer sammy woo
    he'll know what to do " I like this sammy woo guy. Keep flowing with him!
     
  9. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And? AND? Don't leave me hanging, man! BTW - Tight!
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I got my fifty... SCREENPLAY PLEASE?

    ""and two baby car seats"
     
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