Quiet Poetry Lounge : Crabs in the Bucket of Critique

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by tUFFY, Mar 17, 2004.

  1. tUFFY

    tUFFY Active Member MEMBER

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    Why is it so hard for us to give to each other,
    Why so hard for love from sister to brother,
    Why can't you say either I like it or not,
    Why can't you tell me the talent I've got.

    White folks, Asians, Indians, and all races,
    Pull each other up allowing all to save faces,
    Why must we be like crabs in a bucket,
    So quick to let go, so quick to say **** it.

    I promise not to forget from whence I came,
    I promise not to lose my head if I ever find fame.
    I promise to give to all of my race,
    I promise not to quicken my pace.

    I love you all for your blood runs with mine,
    I fought for our freedom in an earlier time,
    I sacrificed for all be ye old or be ye young,
    We shall over come my favorite song.

    All I ask is a little support,
    To help to conquer this fiendish world of a sort.
    So give me your opinion and I'll give you mine,
    If you can give me a word or two to help me shine.
     
  2. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awesome wake up call
    Thank you for sharing
    this insightful piece with
    da' famlee :peace:

    Much Peace,
    Akilah
    :read:
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice drop
    indeed...
    thanks for sharing
    and placing a
    eye opener
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the way you posed this, it only takes a second to give a compliment, flow on.
     
  5. tUFFY

    tUFFY Active Member MEMBER

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    money where mouth is

    now famlee I put my money where my mouth was and I went on a critiquing rampage this morning and I will probably do it again this morning. Now would somebody go to short stories and give me some concrete loving criticism or strokes. Thank you tUFFY


    QUOTE=watzinaname]I liked the way you posed this, it only takes a second to give a compliment, flow on.[/QUOTE]
     
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