Black Poetry : Couples Only

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Sep 24, 2001.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ramblings from the hope chest


    holding her old leather skates
    in her hands...
    she fingered
    the frayed laces

    had it been just
    last night?...

    the DJ called for
    "couples only"
    the strobe lights sprinkled
    color~magic over
    the oval skating
    rink

    tranforming it into
    a slick ballroom floor

    the fast-paced
    r&b sounds
    simmered all
    the way down

    and the lights
    went all the way
    low

    how long had it
    been since
    the last time

    he took her
    hand and led her
    to the skating rink
    floor

    on a "couples only"
    call....

    rolling smooth
    & slow?


    Alyce, 2001 (c)


    From: "The Woman In My Attic"
     
  2. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful Scene

    Don't remember ever reading you along these flavors. This is very pretty Alyce...spreading your talent across many horizions.
     
  3. epiphany

    epiphany Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reminds me.....

    Reminds me of my teen days....
    when things were fresh and new........nice flo Alyce

    Epiphany:heart:
     
  4. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    hey

    this was so well written it felt like i was there

    my credit to the writer

    go on wit yo' bad self

    >DSSNY<
     
  5. MsDLite

    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes...

    remembering...
    this is sweet, Ms. A~

    pull more from the hope chest~
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ms. A

    tell the woman in ya attic she had me thinking of

    way back when
    the DJ called
    for "couples only"
    and I didn't
    have anyone to
    skate backwards
    with
    jumping to the present
    DJ still calling for dem
    "couples" and Im just an only
    holding the wall gurl



    Diggin that lady
     
  7. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce,

    Girl! You took me down memory lane...straight to the skating ring.....I visualized this here. Thanks:)

    Madd Sistahly Love:heart:
    CCBSKYN
     
  8. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    watching two people dancing slow or skating are two of the most sensual visions...these words are full of gracefulness...you always know how to set the scene....

    K
     
  9. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a beautiful love scene painted on canvas. thank you for taking me there with this one, alyce.

    ~~~jusletitflo~~~
     
  10. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Memories!!!

    Alyce--that brought it all back for me--doing the slow drag across the skating rink floor--this was precious--I never could sakte that well, but I could slow drag all over the flow--thanks for this piece--Ra
     
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