Quiet Poetry Lounge : Could I (1st time post

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by jrouse, Sep 16, 2002.

  1. jrouse

    jrouse Member MEMBER

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    I saw you from across the room,
    Your eyes lifted me from my gloom and I was doomed.
    Like that brown sugar pulsing through your veins,
    irresistable,
    yet deadly.
    Entranced,
    My mind danced,
    danced to the beat of an unknown tune.
    Like a breath, it became my own.

    You transcended night and day,
    The dawn of a new beginning,
    Like a child's first breath,
    A virgin's last moment,
    My dreams began to speak,

    Our lives unfold,
    Dramas on hold,
    Passions untold,

    You asked me could I be the one,
    Could I be the one fo fulfill your innermost desires,
    Could I be the one to quench your heart's fires,
    Could I be that one?

    J. Rouse

    P.S. You guys tell me what you think, an honest opinion. Just wanted to know if I should keep writing.
     
  2. DaFlavaFul

    DaFlavaFul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    could i be the one?
    the first one to touch ur spot
    make u tremble make u hot?
    much love and welcome to the spot! keep flowing!
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WELCOME TO DA FLOW

    AS i roam da sky
    i welcome u to da house of destee's place
    as u unwined for a good time to shine
    and fulfill da desires and take da bliss a bit
    higher that set things on fire as i welcome
    u within upon family & friendz :toast:
    :jumping: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :jumping:
     
  4. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    :wave: Haaaaaaaaay JRouse :wave:

    ~ Welcome ~ Welcome ~ Welcome ~

    ~ Flow ~ Flow ~ Flow ~ Flow ~ Flow ~

    Always and forever you should flow! :toast:

    I'm going to copy this thread to the main Poetry Forum
    so more Family Members can enjoy your "1st Time Post"
    and welcome you too! :)

    Thank you for joining us and please make yourself at home.

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  5. herlove

    herlove Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WELCOME I LIKE YOUR FLOW CONTINUE TO SPEAK WHAT U KNOW ......
     
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