Black Poetry : corrupting you

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Randee, Aug 19, 2004.

  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i could try to understand
    why everything in my life
    seems to fall apart
    especially those closest to my heart
    why i keep pushing when
    i really want you near
    and why it is i still jump in fear
    at every loud noise and when voices rise
    why i try to stab before
    i'm attacked and why i
    simply don't go after what i lack
    i could try to understand
    but the facts remain
    I accept these things
    will stay the same

    and now, when i want things right
    when i am tired and trying to
    give up this internal fight
    why does everything i touch
    still end up corrupt
    you think its your luck thats
    got you down and out
    but its another page
    in the chapter of my life
    i am only your captor
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    to accept pain...
    as a part of the story
    I too can relate to
    such a sentiment
    while others think
    they have bad luck
    they fail to see...
    it's an onging saga
    of my lifes story...

    Feeling the pain in this piece...
    Very well written...
    the emotion radiates...
    from the page...
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Randee

    Mannnnnnnnnnnn...shoot. I've been there...and it ain't a nice place to be. You start doubting self...thinking negative of self...feeling confused...thinking something's wrong with you...almost losing hope. Actually, I think it's GOD's way of making you looking toward her/him.

    :thanks: for sharing your personal mental trial and tribulation.

    :toast:
     
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    This was an insightful piece. I like it because it is so different. Great flow
     
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    Girl, I truly feel you. Fear keeps us fenced off from much of what we love, until we one day rise up. Much love to you, sister, as you continue to forage on. :heart: This flow is lovely.
     
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    to fear is to hold back ......i felt every lick here
    tyte drop
     
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    When you feel scared that everything you touch will fail, then you just stop. But that's not really living is it? You emoted this feeling very clearly poet.
     
  8. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey guys, hormones are surging through my body as the baby is due in two weeks and I feel like a lot of things are not in place that should be. Will we ever be ready? Thanks for the love and support it means everything to me at this point in time.
     
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    this was deep randee...
    btw...everything is gonna be aiight...you're ready now, you just may not know it yet ;)
    one love
    khasm
     
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    you are such a wonderful writer...
    gifted in wordage...enotions
    and now two weeks before...I truly understand
    the apprehensions, the tensions, the fears...
    trust me when i tell you....you are right about the hormones
    the chemicals are running rampage, the baby
    (I called mine a parasite about this time) is rumbling...
    just remember
    stop..listen to your heart then go
    and BREATHE....BREATHE