Black Poetry : cool & intact song poem # 15

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Jul 14, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    sitting at home making up songs to sing to you
    trying to find a way to speak to you
    I get it down - the words come out in rhyme
    I remember the notes I'll play next time
    then
    I think about the silences - so thick
    I couldn't let my body, words, lips
    say anything..

    cool & intact trying to relax
    cool & intact tryng to reach out and say
    you are so special ..helping me free my soul
    my spirit
    you the one I care about
    the one i want to shout about
    Instead

    cool & intact trying to relax
    cool & intact waiting...waiting
    Ooh
    it will never be until I let you see
    this cool & intact is a
    loose fire
    burnng for We
    and you
    you
    you can UNFReeze meee
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    released from the deep freeze to warmth
    ya pen red hot and flowin well speak on !
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yea, we want to be cool and intact, but the intense feelings won't let us. I think all who read this will "get" what you're saying here. Feeling the vibe.
     
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    feelin the vibe you pen this smooth
    nice drop
    Peace
    Angel
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    thanks you three (rich, watz & mzblkangel)
    you keep the ember inside alive...keep me in a place of warmth
    i thank you for that
     
  6. Alpha Male

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    Sitting at home all alone, reading your poem
    Feeling at home, I know her song, and problem.
    With in alone there is no we, only got dam me!
    And thats no fun, no fun at all, so you see, I see!
     
  7. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man if this poem ain't scarin' me.....
    I felt like I was reading my diary...
    Perfect..I love it....flow on:wink:
     
  8. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Im in college studying music vocal performance ma and I would have loved to put music to this and sung the hell out of it! You got it going on and I'm diggin this vibe so much!
     
  9. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "Freeze frame" ...it's time to melt some of that ice away. Love this drop, it was a "chilly-warm" piece :cool: thanks for sharing.
     
  10. gempis

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    deepy, this really speaks to me because I am that tough one. The one who stays cool and intact. It's not an easy place to be, either. Love the way you flowed this; mad props.
     
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