Black Poetry : Conversations(part II)

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  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    -- my friend

    -- are u serious? this happened the other day?
    + yes girl, so do u think i should leave or i should stay?
    -- i think u should let ur heart lead the way
    + my heart says i love him, but my mind is gone astray

    -- have u talked to him since then?
    + no, he's called but i havent been answerin
    -- why not? listen to what hes got to say
    + why u takin his side? ur suppose to be my friend

    -- girl, im not takin sides, but u cant just walk away w/o words
    + true. but ive just been so angry, thinkin about it hurts
    -- understandable, but i still think u should talk to him 1st
    + and then i believed in him which is even worse

    -- dont get all worked up. do u even know this "tamika" chic?
    + no, but she better not be busted or ima have a fit
    -- (giggles) girl, ur crazy, i cant even believe this
    + i know, i thought i had a good man, but i had another dog with a ****

    -- (giggles) if u think about, he's not that bad of a guy
    + what u mean? he cheated on me, then he lied
    -- girl... did u forget he paid ur bills, pockets, took care of u, and this only happened one time
    + but what if one time turns into 10 times?

    -- then u know what u gotta do, u cant stay waitin 4 a change
    + so why shouldn't i leave now and make an exchange
    -- cuz u love him and he loves u and ur not ready to move on from this stage
    + but girl I read this book a million time, im ready to turn the page

    -- point blank, he's a good man
    + so ur tellin me to give him another chance?
    -- no, im tellin u to talk to him and then advance
    + aiight girl... i gtg, ill call u lata to tell u about my future plans

    -- aiight sweetie, u do that, love ya, lata...

    -- him
    = his friend

    = how and the hell did u let it get to this? (laughing)
    -- stop laughing dawg, i never meant to get into this sh**
    = i told u that u wouldnt be able to commit
    -- man... it just happened, kind of slipped

    = so what r u gonna do? sounds like shes not havin it
    -- she wont answer my calls or take the flowers i sent
    = u sent her flowers? its not her b-day, so she doesnt need any presents (laughing)
    -- get serious man, i really do love her and i miss her presence

    = well you can only wait til she's ready, u know how women are
    -- yea, but what if she never gets ready, i wouldnt know when to end and where to start
    = I doubt it dawg, call her again lata, say the right things- think smart
    -- I'm not tryna game her, im gonna speak from my heart

    = well u do that, but im not into settling down, not yet at least
    -- its not as bad as it seems
    = why have one, when I can have three? (laughing)
    -- i dont know, but she's all i want and need

    = whoa! ur talkin like u wanna get married
    -- i need my girl back 1st, so i can plant the seed
    = ur talkin crazy, ur young, live life and breathe
    -- i know she's it, i know shes the one for me

    = so ur tellin me, ur not gonna hit another chic?
    -- it will be hard at 1st but i know i can handle it
    = thats what u said last time, ur a playa - get used to it
    -- i worked hard to get this far, i can't lose this

    = like i said, call her, then fill me in with some details
    -- aiight dawg, hope it works and nothin fails
    = handle ur business man, only time will tell
    -- yeah, i get at u lata, i gtg home and check my mail

    = aiight kid, peace....

    To be continued (again)...
     
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    that was tyte... i really liked your flow keep it going
     
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    I've never seen poetry like this, poeticlyspeaking. Gurl, is dis something new...a new style of poetry??? I believe you is starting sumthin up in heah. I've always wished that I could write short stories, but my skillz ain't there...yet this style of writing would release that strong desire to write short stories while at the same time...write poetry. Gurl, this work of yours is very good and the style format is amazing... + * -- Chile you be brilliant. I don't know bout anybody else, but this is inspiring ME!

    Thank you...thank you very much!

    Joyce
    :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
     
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    No, thank you. I don't know what my intentions were, I just wanted to write and do sumthiin different at the same time. Im happy that i can inspire u, that only inspires me to write. part III will be the last one, it will be done by tonight fa'sho, once again thank u, god bless...
     
  5. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    But it is an original idea right??? Or have you seen this style used before?
     
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    everything i do is original baby!! i dont copy, not my style.
     
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    You go gurl...but don't be mad at me...cuz I'm sho impressed wit this originality and I gon copy yo style! It may take me 9 or 10 months to write my first poem like dis' un...but you have inspired me to the nth degree. Hope you're cool wit dat.

    Joyce

    P.S. Of course if anybody ask me where I got this style of writing from...I am sho to tell them dat PoeticlySpeaking started dis in me.:)
     
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    LOL. okay.once again, thank you.
     
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    awwwwww that waz good I"m bout to go check out part III right now nice flow peace and blessins keep flowin :)
     
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    tyte poem.........keep writin. bout to check out pt.3 much love :)