Black Poetry : conversation over candlelight..

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  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the other day you said "dial" was on the other line
    i said "dial who"
    you said "dial tone" and hung up the phone like whoa

    i felt like a winner when i made you your favorite dinner for 7 p.m
    8 p.m 9p.m....you were a no show
    i even wanted to dance slow to our favorite song....
    o.k i admit sometimes i am wrong. maybe i shouldn't have turned around when i saw her in a thong but......
    so what you like D'angelo calling your friend
    "girl put it on channel ten there he go again" and i'm like o.kaaaay
    and if that's not a sin..
    playing me like my ice is thin well your is melting...

    anyway you know i have never cheated, never lied to you
    i have nothing to hide from you . i want to know what's inside of you that's the occasion now..

    i notice your evasion even when you're in my pr(essence)
    {i waver my finger through the flame as it loses its' luminescence}

    she said "you don't love me like you use to. it's not like when we use to date. now you stay out late with your friends..

    me hangin' out with them what about yours?? so what if i lock the doors they'll start banging against the window and i know it's not the feds
    it's your girlfriend and that girl with the fake dreads.

    "her dreads aint fake"

    look how can we make this work i mean you believe the hearsay??
    everytime i see you it's like what did she hear today??
    i hear the same about you.

    "you doubt me"

    why?? should i doubt you??

    {the flame grows dim}

    "you said you didn't cheat but you had perfume on your neck and a phone number in your pocket!!!!"

    i told you that was when we...

    "did you sleep with her. i don't want to hear it. i'm about to go.
    i thought i was ready but i'm not.

    look it's not that bad. i don't want to waste these special years of my life. i'm serious.
    i want you someday to be my wife

    "tell that to that girl who called you last night" as she receives a call on her cellaphone excusing herself..

    look i don't want to fight anymore. i've made mistakes and you have too.
    forgive me like i forgave you already. i want to go steady with you..

    she cries
    "look jehiah i think we should just be friends"

    through the window up pulls a benz as she grabs a her celly and keys
    the candlelight goes out as she leaves
    with him....

    pt 2 next...


















     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    DIZZZZZAMMM OVA CANDLELITE

    ON DA PHONE HERE HOME ALONE
    WHATS WRONG AS THE TALK SHO
    BECOME A BATTLE OF GUILT
    WORDS FLO LIKE A TALK SHOW
    AS THE LIGHT DEM LOW U FLO ME MO!!!!!
    pt#2 READY FO U....................................
     
  3. poeticdelight

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    *creative flow*

    let's see,

    i think i'll give it ten stars ********** :lol:

    as for the intro, that is so cold *smh*

    it would only take me once to be mistreated...

    i mean someone who could do something
    like that and not think twice about it

    umm.. come on now!

    pd
     
  4. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx $RICH$.
    candlelight of love blows away but no it reaalllly didn't happen to the dun :coo:

    poetic delight.
    i feel for him (or me) :wink: gotta be circumspective and calculative with you :lol: but it would be fun.
    you above all should know that if this were real i would have had her on all fours. :lol:

    just playin'

    thanx.
     
  5. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx Cindy.

    your words were true

    nfinitely
    jh.
     
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    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    J'hiah

    this is what I call a ~reality flow~

    understanding and relating...you have to give people the benefit of the doubt. No one is perfect in relationships. We're human and make mistakes. This is why Trust, Honesty and Communication is so very important in a relationships.

    And she'll soon find out that...Chief wit da Benzo...
    Well...

    the grass aint always greener on the other side!!

    lovin this piece:cool:
     
  7. garlicsalt99

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    Misinterpreted actions, and circumstantial evidence. Amidst all of this, the truth can stand on its own, for if it is something shady going on, it will come out eventually. You did a good job. I followed this conversation as if I was next door listening.
     
  8. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Afridancr-
    tru'dat. she'll find out about "Chief with the Benzo" in pt.2 :wink:
    thanx for the read.

    garlicsalt-maan you have key to what is really going on and what will be the end :cool:
    thanx for followin
     
  9. Kitana

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    why

    do people fall in love with a person because they admire certain qualities in them...and then bang..the first thing they want to do is change them..if there's no freedom to be yourself in a relationship, then there is no relationship...nice piece..cute..

    K
     
  10. shaneak

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    Excellent Flow...

    I liked the dialogue. Easy to read too... You definitely put this one down.... I'm looking forward to part 2.. Hope its coming soon....
     
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