Black Poetry : Configurations....

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    one mornin i found myself loose...
    lost where the sands don't kiss
    the blu oceans lips and make it blush...

    i didn't know how i felt about this new thing
    that clawed at the tips of my toes
    like a paracite, that wouldn't let go
    untill i accepted the fact that it was there
    to hold me till' i recognized it tighting across my belly...

    i would play with the peircings in places that would
    bring an upset stomack to my religon,
    while settling on comtemplations
    designed to enlighten my core...
    (maybe religon needs to Peptobismol)

    being this way seemed so natural
    it wasn't like Apocolyspe loomed
    in the sky protraying lights
    of Hell, Heaven, and Purgatory,
    that would set fear into peoples hearts
    at the meer thoughts...

    but creeping onto thoughts
    sliping, sliding, unreal,
    (could this really be happening)
    was i reborn or condemned?

    copywrite 2004, all rights reserved
     
  2. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW, you have talent, Nice scribe, keep em coming
     
  3. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    Very, very, captivating
    Lil' sis! This is
    Awesome!
    Loving it!
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was feeling this piece...and it got my attention, very good writting...but I'm not susprised.
    You're going far in life, just keep rolling upwards...to my sweetness
     
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    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes

    she does have alot of talent THEONE
    my favorite line was............where sands don't kiss the blu ocean lips
    Very well done story :)
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol, thanks for the love yall...glad u feelin me...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice piece really enjoyed it
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The images you pose just reach out and grab us, whether you're writing about just day to day occurrences, or life altering events. Another wonderful piece.
     
  9. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love yall glad u liked it...
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