Black Poetry : confection*

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thepoetsean, Jun 12, 2001.

  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ( to whom i want it to concern...)


    sugary--
    savagery--

    chocolate--
    chaos...

    confectioner's sugar glazed
    honey coated--
    brown sugar sprinkled
    lips***
    kissing my--

    i

    feel like a kid wth dreams of Willy Wonka's Chocolate Factory--
    getting acquainted with a--

    walking talking speaking thinking dreaming chocolate being...
    i'm
    chocolate feenin'
    much to my surprise


    longing to be
    holding loving squeezing
    the life from my

    walking talking speaking thinking dreaming chocolate being

    seeming

    as though
    sun shines at her every angle
    she be glistening through her soul--
    manifesting all the beauty God created...

    her love be stinging I


    like wise men reiterating the
    hurt of love--
    and the fleeting of beauty--

    though--

    i doubt very seriously that her--
    innate spiritual beauty
    will deteriorate
    *she make a black man feel new like
    nineteen years have never been lived through the eyes of

    I

    feel giddy, head-spinning and set adrift to a large extent...
    **** sweets...

    mama said there'd be cavaties from indulgence--
    but i'd rather chew my teeth from my head than
    leave this...

    sugary
    savagery--this

    chocolate
    chaos--this

    everpresent personification
    of the sweetest confection
    i have ever come to know--

    blessed be i to meet she

    this
    walking talking speaking thinking dreaming chocolate being
    i be seeing--

    blessed be i to want her.


    sean.

    (a bit winded with this one, sorry)
     
  2. MzNappi

    MzNappi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** u wrote a long poem!!!

    this is longer than anything i ve seen u write

    beautiful imagery of a chocoalte being
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And this was definitely

    S C R U M P T I O U S !!

    Finger lickin' good sugah dumplin'!

    Definitely loved the artistry ~


    :heart:feltpoetry keep em' comin' :wink:
     
  4. Bishop

    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is tight!!!! Like the way you brought this one.
     
  5. Heartbeat

    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    changing images..very nice. Thanks for sharing.

    BE
     
  6. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice...Very Nice....

    What a lucky girl... I'm really diggin this.... I'm kind of hungry now though... ;)
     
  7. MapleXtract

    MapleXtract Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I tell ya...

    ...your verbal skills are, nothing short of, amazing... I'm left without enough words to explain how much I'm diggin' them...:jumping::jumping:
     
  8. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mmmmmmmmmmmm

    "
    walking talking speaking thinking dreaming chocolate being"

    can there BE anything else ?

    Yummy :p
     
  9. Afridancr

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    mmm...

    what sweet poetry!!!:eek:
     
  10. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nappi, N2, Bishop, Heartbeat, shaneak, Maple (of course), and Afri...

    *group hug*


    i'd like to thank you all for taking the time out to read and respond to this piece. I really felt this one because i really think that i have that walking talking speaking thinking dreaming chocolate being in my sights (and i wanna keep her there). Just thought it would be nice to share with y'all the way i feel about her. thanks again fam for the read the love and support.

    luv y'all!!!


    sean.