Black Poetry : Concealed? Revealed...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Aug 30, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Here I am,
    Trying to live holy,
    And to remain meek and lowly…
    As I listen to you give orders,
    As if you were made for the part.
    You, trying to seem flawless,
    Without blemish…
    In my eyes your heart,
    Was unperfected.
    But you keep up the front,
    Because of what you think,
    Is highly expected,
    Of you…
    I’m sorry…
    I didn’t mean to expose what I knew,
    Or was I wrong,
    And my info was new to you?

    But it bothers me,
    That iniquity,
    Is seated in high places,
    With plaster masks,
    Sealed on their faces.
    But how come,
    Their shout is the loudest,
    Their jump is the highest,
    They’re always in the forefront,
    And their word is the tightest.
    But you know what,
    Even though they’re upsetting me,
    I know that You God hurt the most,
    Especially when in Your name,
    They boast,
    And act as if,
    They have it all together.
    But it’s just not so,
    And You know.
    They’re not living right,
    Even as deep as darkness,
    Dark mess,
    But I know,
    That it will soon be exposed to light.
    Thank You for the promise.
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No man is without sin and the truth as you have stated, will come to light. Be careful in judgement, unless we be judged harshly. Your form and the poem itself is righteous indeed. Thanks for sharing.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done one so judge be judged reveal truth
    i love how u pose this flow so openly ans wit spirit
     
  4. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks 4 ur response. I definitely understand that no man is without sin...I can vouch 4 that... But when u start trying 2 ACT as if u r superior & above everyone else, as if u have it altogether, and u know u doin wrong but u still tryin to tell me how to live holy, annnddd u in leadership.....then I have a problem with that. Just one of my many opinions. Thanks for hearin it.
     
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    I hear you on that Chastity. Like the folks who "found religion" after years of boozing, skirt chasing, and fighting. Then they turn around and start telling you what to do. This was on point.
     
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    Striking piece...you've composed here.
    Thanks for sharing your flow with us.

    Be sure when you post, to take time
    and return the love you've recieved,
    by reading and replying to your
    fellow poets work.

    Love is the common thread that holds us together! :heart:

    Thanks for sharing! :wave:
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Felt This!!!

    [email protected], this piece moved me...
    I felt the depth and breath of this undertaking...
    write on poet...write on...
     
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    :wave: Haaaaaaaaaaaaay Chastity :wave:

    Beautiful work ... keep your eyes focused on you my dear Darling Sister (?) ... i believe them other folk, shout'n all loud, trying to get all the attention and everything ... is meant simply to get our eyes off of us and our own behavior ... living right aint easy, stumbling blocks all along the way ... remain forever encouraged!

    Thanks for sharing!

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    Whoa, great message and awesome flow and delivery. Gwan, gurl, this is :hot:
     
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    Ah, if only my ex and his mother could see this..... *sigh* People who live in glass houses shouldn't throw stones. Cliche, but true. Excellent write!
     
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