Black Poetry : Computer Love

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  1. aqueenpassing

    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You said you saw my picture and you thought I was really fine
    you sent me yours I thought you were divine. We e-mailed awhile
    back and forth from time to time, I asked for your number and then
    I sent you mine.

    I was really surprised to hear you on the other end, you said my
    voice matched my looks so you told me I was pretty again. I thought
    we had some connection as much as we talked, you invited be over
    for coffee and a nice walk.

    I was hesitant at first because you I still did not know, but what did
    I have to loose so I decided to go. I asked if we could meet somewhere
    where other people would be you said you understood and felt it would
    be better we both could relax and be free.

    When I first saw you took my breath away, one single rose and
    teddy bear too. This was starting very well I didn’t know what to do.
    we laughed and talked about our loves, losses and life how we didn’t
    like to argue and neither of us wanted to fight.

    I smiled and dropped my head you took my hand in yours and nothing
    more was said. You invited me over but I said I would have to pass
    you hugged me kissed my check gently smiled and said you wanted
    It to last.

    You promised you would call me to make sure I got home, but the phone
    never rung again; from you I never heard. Soon I saw you on the Internet
    you seemed to have gotten me confused you were trying to make someone
    else your lovers nest.

    I still wonder to this day what went wrong what did I say? I guess its not
    hard to see, I just didn’t want to play right away, you see I am not an easy
    lay.

    Copyright by Yvonne Coleman-Burney (Queen) 2002
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    computer love is like a prey
    thingz go wrong dat's da say

    no need to play
    on first date
    spend da time to unwined

    computer love has a taste
    it's a love wit bit caress
    so why play
    don't think about a lay
    dis ain't da way
    so night night to computer love !!!
     
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    REMINDER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    I particularly enjoyed this piece for the subject matter and the way you weaved a poetic piece into a story ....but the underlying social implication did not escape me either...the big"What if?", what if he was "The One", or what if ? he was a "Serial Killer/Rapist"....Now the lesson or moral of this story is follow your instincts ...and you may live to analyze your decision.
    Blessings on Ya House!
     
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    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "THANKS"

    Thanks msluciousb,
    you are so right! this piece came about listening to friends and even messing around my self on some of these crazy sites, I know most people won't admit that but it is so true of a whole lot of people now days. But the things I hear from friends and just people in general about how there life styles don't allow them to get out and look or be available to meet people. In conclusion, I find that you take a chance no matter whether it’s on the computer or just meeting at a coffee shop, you never know what you are coming up against. The truth in which you spoke is just being careful and yes following your instincts. Thanks for sharing that wisdom of yours it's very much appreciated.

    Hugs Queen
    :kiss:
     
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    You'll know it's right when the person treats you like the Queen that you are.

    Never sell yourself short because you want to be accepted.

    Doing that will get you excepted.

    Peace.
     
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    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "THANKS"

    Thanks PM,
    I hear Ya! that's why I am still by myself single.... Not going to settle for less, I have a lot to give and I expect that in return.

    Much love to ya:kiss:
    Queen
     
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    MissPoetik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    computer love...

    this was a nice read girl... something that i'm sure we've all gone through either with a computer love or some other man that was moving a bit too fast...
     
  8. aqueenpassing

    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Ms P.

    You are right about that. Just being real, must don't want to admit it, but such as life...

    Be Blessed
    Queen
     
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    In my mind i saw the entire
    seen...heard the smiles
    felt the sunshine

    Good work!!!

    NittyGritt ReddClay
     
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    queen.


    mmm mmm mmm... this sounds all too familiar!

    kinda makes you wonder... just because i'm on
    the net... does that mean i want to get laid?!!
    *sheesh!* ...anyway, it's his loss sis!! thanks
    for sharing your vibe.

    alwayspeace,
    elayne.
     
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