Black Poetry : Complications of the heart

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Kitana, Aug 29, 2002.

  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so okay
    I know I have a heart
    an organ made of flesh and blood
    right?
    it's purpose is to beat to keep
    me alive

    so

    why did it stop beating the instant
    I laid eyes on you

    and

    why does it skip a beat
    and palpitate erratically
    whenever you
    come near me

    because

    it's supposed to be
    completely healthy
    so why does it have these murmurs
    and irregular heart rythyms~
    isn't that
    kinda strange

    and

    why does my pulse beat
    at a rate of a thousand
    beats per minute
    whenever you walk in
    the room

    and

    why do I get these random signals
    warning me
    telling me there is a lack of oxygen
    in the air that I breathe
    whenever you're in the vicinity

    and

    why do I go into adrenalin overdrive
    causing me to need injections of you
    to keep me alive
    whenever you kiss me

    and

    when you make love to me
    so completely
    I swear my heart simply
    stops inside of me

    so

    maybe I need a new heart
    because mine seems to be
    not working
    properly

    and

    I was thinking
    maybe you
    could give me yours
    and if it works
    maybe you'll let me keep it

    so what do you think?

    (c) nfn 2002
     
  2. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    kt.


    ahhhh... such a sweet proposition!! :)

    ...& seein' that you spelled it out so very
    loving-ly... how could he possib-ly resist??

    as always... i'm lovin' your words chile!!

    itsallLove.

    elayne.
     
  3. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love it!!!!!!!! your style brings the smiles!!!!!

    thank ya!

    alyce
     
  4. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now this is love !

    in its truest form !
     
  5. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I would give you mine
    but it beats just like yours whenever you are near

    a switch would be pointless
    but maybe we could combine

    loving the loveleness of your flow
     
  6. mojo

    mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I've always enjoyed your work. Even though I had to look for you in the archives :D I hope this means I can read more, from now on!

    Thank you for this!

    MOJO
     
  7. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh Wow!

    This was extremely sweet!!! Diggin ya love language Kitana!!!

    Pleasure to read you ...
    Reas
     
  8. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dang!
    This is an awesomely breathtaking peace.

    Coco :heart:
     
  9. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The ending of this piece made me smile...so that means it touched me. Good work, would like to read more!
     
  10. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Elayne..that first time, that first bolt of raw electricity, that first everything, is just that good.....how could you resist...:)

    A...I am so glad you liked it..thanks for the smile...

    Natasha...it's all good when the love is true...

    Shaz..

    I would take your heart
    and give you mine
    then the beat of our two hearts
    could combine
    into a perfect rythym
    of harmony
    beating a lovesong of you and me

    Mojo...thank you for taking the time to read what I have to offer..it's much appreciated...

    Reason..thanks for diggin it..it's all good when love can be this sweet..

    Coco..now I'll take that as a big compliment....because you know how much I love your work...

    Redlady..if it touched you enough to make you smile..thats all the reward I need...

    K
     
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