Black Poetry : Complex Melodies

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  1. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I have emotions for this Complex Melody
    Supressed feelings are brought to the surface
    I gave myself to harmony
    And he touched every key
    Played me in so many combinations
    It's only a classical thought
    But with me his movements were different
    A moment longer with him
    I need to step aside
    I love what he chose for me to see
    Because this COMPLEX MELODY
    He....Moves me
    Descriptions of these......
    I dont even know what to call it
    Maybe i'll call him unfamiliar
    I'VE NEVER FELT LIKE THIS
    Perhaps it was so long ago
    He feels through his music
    And i think to myself
    WE MADE MuSic
    oohs and aahs
    There was no need for yes and no's
    My Complex Melody already knew

    What have i DONE
    My ink bleeds thoughts
    Can i get him to understand?
    That what i feel is beyond his physical presence
    That inside my heart beats differently
    That his comfort brings me to this zone
    Im relaxed

    Sooo into you
    This moment, It could last forever
    I'm caught up in your rapture
    Maybe I'm ahead of myself
    He only wanted to make me smile
    Im indulging in what he considers to be a temporary fix
    Lets forget about his and my problems
    **** this is so complex
    If he only knew

    That right now
    I've been observing him
    Feeling him personally
    But i'm in acoma
    I can't I will not wake up from this slumber
    I wanna get lost in COMPLEX MeLoDiEs
    Perhaps then he could understand
    That this may be the only way to make him permanent
    Cause right now im not prepared to wake up
    I Want
    I Need him to almost embrace it
    The simplicity of such a melody
    Me....
    My melody wants you to feel that
    I wanna pursue you.
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Intricately woven into his melody, wow...I was shaking my head through much of this. You described that deeply felt love oh so well. Beautiful piece!
     
  3. Versatile

    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you....your opinion was greatly appreciated
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this piece was so felt as it drift deep inside my mental how u scribe true
    warmth of love
     
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    THis is Raw, Versatile

    Trully in the moment.

    Like this one.

    D.S.
     
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    Can i say welcome backk enough?
    No i think not.. Welcome back!
    I miss those familiar faces! :blowkiss:
    I loved your scribe..
    i think im more excited to see you here!
    But your words speak in volumes....
    but your presense is extreme!
     
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    I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is so wonderful to have someone who can touch your keys, and make one heart hum in balance.
    I enjoyed your flow

    Peace
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nicely written. Flo on poet!!
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Perhaps it was so long ago
    He feels through his music
    And i think to myself
    WE MADE MuSic
    ^^^
    my fav part'
    its hot to see people stepping it up
    great piece'
    8/10
     
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    real beauty inside this joint
     
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