Black Poetry : Competition

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SwtT, Dec 3, 2003.

  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The curtains are drawn
    I have played my part
    I competed for your love
    But I lost my heart

    I laid out all my cards
    I thought that I would win
    She came along with a "royal flush"
    So I guess I lose...again

    There's nothing I can say
    I won't resort to violence
    I 've already said my peace
    So I now I sit in silence

    I know soulmates don't dissapate
    I will always be in your life
    So even after her...and many others
    Even after you settle down and get a wife....

    I will always be there
    In the back of your mind
    Wondering If I got better with age
    Like a fine wine

    I lost the battle for your love
    And I bargained my heart
    Put my weapons on the table
    And so now, I depart

    You chose the "better" one
    But hey...I can find another friend
    I will love another lover
    So my best wishes to you I send

    She wasn't real comptetion against me
    I guess I never had the perfect man
    Because a real King can see a Queen
    Among all the peasants in the land
     
  2. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am feeling this flow, this is tight girl! keep it coming
     
  3. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks hi class:)
     
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    I particularly like the head held high pride at the end. Nicely written.
     
  5. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes my sista...so so SO great to read you again
    and it is true
    my sista a King will KNOW his Queen
    and YOU are mos def' a young Queen without a doubt :)
    lovely drop...
     
  6. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you wazinaname:) I 'ppricate it:D

    Triniti!!!!!! Girl, I missed writing and thanks for the compliment...coming from a true Queen:):heart:
     
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    Trumped by you again, much love!
     
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    i am feeling you on this
    nice yes very nice read flow on
     
  9. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So true, a King knows his Queen.

    He will understand the error of his ways.

    I like the fact that U are like cool, whatever, I'ma be aiight.

    Keep your mind right & your game will stay tight.
     
  10. angelicsage

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    Girl this was "Incredible"....
    believe...The Sage is feeling this piece...
    love the analogy of the gamble...the battle
    and especially the part about him not
    having the insight to see a true gem...
    now with that alone...you scibed a mouth full

    Love this flow Girl :wink:
     
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