Black Poetry : Commitment

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Committed as the color red to blood,
    As a king to his castle,
    Doth unhappiness plagiarize each day's
    Attempt at finding a spirit.
    I dwell in my shadow's shadow
    And see nothing,
    Because nothing is there,
    Wishing for happiness when I should be
    Looking for me.
    I have a chest in my closet locked where all
    Treasures lie.
    It remains untouched except for my
    Personality that rests juxtaposed to my
    Sense of humor.


    Please Critique if need be***
    :sand: *~Be careful wut u choose 2 do in life becuz sum1 may be following ur footsteps~* :sand:
     
  2. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like this poem it was touching and I could understand the feeling.
     
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    Time to rummage through that chest, sounds like there are many gems to discover there. Liked the creativity in this search for self.
     
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    dis here was off da hook feeling ya vibe on dis one !
     
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    Excellent! finding one's self leads to happiness.
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    BlatinaPoet4u

    Welcome...welcome...welcome...welcome to the Destee.com Family.

    I see you've already made yourself at home. That's wonderful. :D

    Great scribe, scribe. Searching for self...or what defines self in an attempt to make one happy. Great introspection.

    :thanks: for sharing your thoughts with us.

    :toast:
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Poetrymama

    Now I know you didn't think I was gonna leave this thread without welcoming you to the Family? :D

    WELCOMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

    ...to the Destee.com Family. :grouphug:

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  8. angelicsage

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    sounds like it's time to open the chest
    despite the juxtapositioning...
    that chest might just posses the key
    to bring equilibrium to the spirit...

    Nice flow...
     
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    welcome tot he family
    tight drop u laid....
    thanks for sharing
    come flow with us soon in chat
    www.destee.com/chat
    we be looking for you
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Girl, you workin' ain'tcha?!!! I am loving your flows and welcome :wave:
     
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