Black Poetry : Comfort

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  1. a.s.s

    a.s.s New Member MEMBER

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    Please tell me what you think of this......

    The ticking of the clock,
    Day after day, week after week,
    Strong, soothing, calming,
    Like the constant heat of a fire.
    Though should the clock stop,
    All turns jagged and cold,
    Until the repetition commences again.

    The warmth of a familiar sound,
    The joy of a long seen sight,
    The cradling passage of days
    Comforting if not taken any other way.

    Routine is always the same,
    But open to distortion and change.
    Uncertainty of the dark new,
    Often becomes accepted,
    Then transforms into a piece of you.

    Nostalgia makes hearts warm,
    Future shakes foundations,
    Life is just like the ocean, rising and falling,
    But the erratic sediment always settles.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    it does alwayz settle in tyme

    so shine an flow Welcome to da playground
    of DESTEE'S place and the poetic show
    welcome welcome welcome !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:)
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    a.s.s

    welcome!!

    you talk of llife rolling along, one day to the next like the waves in the ocean, beating to the same rythym, but we can change all of that...life can only be what we want it to be, so if we want more, than it will be more..

    it's all up to us...

    a nice piece..

    k
     
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    NICE DEBUT, AND WELCOME!

    IF IT IS GETTIN YOUR FLOW ON THAT YOU WANT TO ACHIEVE, YOU ARE IN THE RIGHT PLACE, YOU BETTER BELIEVE, I AM BRAND NEW TOO, AND THE LOVE IS JUST GENUINE LIKE NO OTHER SITE ON THE WWW. :D PEACE AND PROSPERITY!
     
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    :wave:'s Hello A,

    I think it's a nice flow.

    Madd Sistahly Love:heart:
    CCBSKYN
     
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    a.s.s New Member MEMBER

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    Well the poem is about little comforts in life, one of these is resembled by the clock, this is like the comfort of repetiton. This means that everyday you do pretty much the same thing and you get used to it and it becomes a comfort. Its also about how these things can change and can be scary at first but then also become a comfort in time. But in the end we all settle down into a contant pattern that we are comfortable in. Also the other comforts entail also repetitious things that you have experienced alot (the sight, smell,etc)

    Its the first poem I've wrote in ages, I'm only 16 but I'm doing an A level in English Literature.
     
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    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    if you are writing like this when you are only 16, then you have many enjoyable years as a poet to look forward to....

    always feel comfortable with what you write and your own interpretation of it...

    you have come to the right place to find support and encouragement for your work...you are surrounded by great talent and warm hearts...

    K
     
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    2 da young gun of de pen

    u got skillz u can bet my friend
    but as u grow u will learn mo
    see as of age ya pen will change
    so do yo do and flow as u know
    dis family love ya so ...hit us wit mo !!!!!:toast:
     
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    Welcome ~ Welcome ~ Welcome

    :wave: :wave: :wave:

    Welcome ~ Welcome ~ Welcome

    I think this is a beautiful poem
    thank you for sharing it with us
    please make yourself at home

    :heart:

    Destee
     
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