Poetry Critiques : Come Alive (For Verna)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by abstract219, Jul 28, 2007.

  1. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Look to the skies
    You will purify yourself.
    So many reasons
    To be alive.

    Look deep within
    For God's guiding light
    If you believe
    Then so will I.

    We are calling,
    Rising, falling
    Then we come alive.
    I'll hold you closer,
    So much closer,
    We'll unwind.

    Maybe the flowing wind
    Will dry your tears away.
    So many reasons
    To be alive.
    Look to the rivers
    Flowing deeply to the sea.
    Miracles occur,
    We'll testify..

    We are calling,
    Rising, falling.
    We come alive.
    I'll hold you closer
    So much closer.
    We'll survive.
     
  2. Yemoja'sGoddess

    Yemoja'sGoddess Banned

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    Awesome Write Poet

    King Abstract219,

    Wow, felt these poetics... "So many reasons to be alive":bullseye: wow... that alone is deep... and I bet you have no clue how many people really need to hear that...

    Flow On Poet, Keep On...

     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One of the things that intitially impressed me about this piece was the ease and tenderness of the words placed. We need that when we can't see our way clear. There was also a bond between the two, that was lovingly expressed.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    This piece makes a strong point with such easy warm way when one seem lost
    it was well done and well accepted
    nice piece
     
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