Black Poetry : Closure

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I close my eyes
    upon sticky wet
    streets
    where many
    personalities
    sleeps
    inside the moments
    i speak under the
    slippery tongue
    as bleeding souls
    suffer in deep in
    agony wit pain
    musical taste
    change constantly
    with time ,confused
    lyrics bounce
    line by line
    words run cross pages
    as they dance in my
    head
    deep in a trance
    cold to da touch
    i sit in silent too long
    inside the corner of
    my thoughts i fine
    the reasons and see
    all da hope i weep in
    dry tears my soul put
    up a vicious fight
    soon i feel da need to
    surrender , disappear
    from sight
    yet the hidden seal
    behind broken fence
    spilling chemicals in
    alluring fashion hiding
    between distorted faces
    i wave the smile
    yet hold no senses
    i must have been just
    slumbering away when
    i suddenly hear my name
    again and again
    but this time the sun set
    beyond the mist of myth
    to a humble closure
    as i watch the clouds
    drop low and assassinate
    the moon just like man
    fleeing from da executioner
    moments of perplexity
    i saw the heavens sweep
    and heard the winds lament
    calling , beckoning
    soundly i wonder if i so answer
    it will be my closure

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    pt. one of three ................. :wave:
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh $$RICH$$, this is amazing. I feel like I've been taken on an odyssey. So lookin to part two and three, brother. :star:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow you took me in with this lovely write i so enjoyed this ride...
    cant wait for the rest...this was tight....Angel
     
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    This was tight I like the way you rolled with it...
    wonderful, wonderful piece...waiting for part 2
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm wih gempis here, you take us to a unique, yet real place and space in time, where everything seems to have multiple meanings. Yet, the answer lies within you. Looking forward to the rest of the series. This is intriguing.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thankz gempis , angel , queen , watz
    i was rumbling wit a mixture
    much love family
     
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    vivid scribe my brotha...
    this did take me there with ya...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thankz khasm much love bruh !
     
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    havent read a series poem from you in a bit my brotha...reminds me of the first days i came here...your poetry was the first i read and this is a beautiful reminder of that same talent i reminisce on :)
     
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    Wonderful, I love it!
     
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