Black Poetry : Closing My Eyes As The Darkness Overwhelms Me...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Jun 23, 2003.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    another song.... :x:

    verse 1

    you say you love me so much
    but you i cannot trust
    and i'm torn in my heart everytime you say those words
    and rapidly i'm fallin' apart you see
    i've given all i have
    but its no use
    cuz obviously you don't appreciate me


    chorus

    closin' my eyes as the darkness overwhelms me
    let my soul breathe, cuz i'm needin' you beside me
    i can feel your heartbeat
    i can see the jagged edges clear
    nearer to you is where i wanna be
    the distance we are is not my fault or yours at all
    but the fact that i miss you so much
    it makes me sorrowful
    i need you holdin' me
    i need you physically
    nearer to you is where i wanna me


    verse 2

    i can't say that i'm surprised or scared
    but i'm down more than before
    we've separated in the past
    but i think this is the last and final time
    cuz i hope you see my heart can't last
    this game of defeat
    and i've given all i have
    but its no use cuz we're finished
    we're finished


    (back chorus)


    hook:

    baby please tell me what's goin' on
    i tried and i tried to make this love strong
    but obviously your love is gone
    so i need to know all the sh*t i did wrong

    (back to chorus)
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You got the music in you, yeah!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sing suga ......coz ya da poet of the week
    let me hear dem tunes
    another add to that hot CD...
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwwwwww thanks 1poet:)


    :) thanks rich....hopefully i'll have a cd out soon!
     
  5. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin' this joint, gotta have trust
    and you got mad skills, Lovely.
    Peace and melody
     
  6. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Im feelin this too...... trust is the foundation of a relationship..let him know
     
  7. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wooooooooooooooooooow...this was alright! I would love to here this mixed down! U go girl!
     
  8. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Lovely,

    WOW!! This is wonderfull!! Another great example of your fabulous talent!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwww thanks skrybe, swtT, and sierra!!!:)
     
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