Black Poetry : Closer Look

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by FloeticFire, Oct 23, 2003.

  1. FloeticFire

    FloeticFire Active Member MEMBER

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    Look at the woman on the street
    Cant find no shelter, aint got nuthin to eat
    Look at the drunk at the liqour sto`
    Drank so much, tries crack to take him higher than b/4
    Check out those rowdy kids jumpin the train
    Taking their time to get home to avoid the
    humilation and pain
    And then theres the single father working with 3 pays
    And da ***** wont let him even touch or see the hands of the ones
    he help create
    And what about that girl, from up the way
    that got pregnant at that young age
    How is she to explain
    She is 15 dollas short on the rent again.
    Look at grandma sewing that hem again
    Look at me looking at he, she, and them
    Why dont I look at me and see what I need to see
    Each of us are a part of something
    Greater than us
    Take time to look and see beyond the faults.
    Sometimes just looking
    Just aint enough.
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm likin' this...
     
  3. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow:)
     
  5. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is on point, and tight.
     
  6. PoeticShae

    PoeticShae Active Member MEMBER

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    I like your flow in this...well done

    Shaela
     
  7. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well said and spoken to the mental
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    powerful piece
    Peace
     
  9. FloeticFire

    FloeticFire Active Member MEMBER

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    Blessings to each of you

    May blessings come to you in every drip of the pen to the canvas. Thank you for your love and consistent support.

    Peace Queens and Kings :thanks:
     
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