Black Short Stories : closed in a lie

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It was a younger girl…the apple of her daddy’s
    Eye…they shared every waken moment
    Together…when he was home from work….
    Her father passed away when she was 3
    Then her family started leaving…..
    3 got married
    2 went ta jail
    2 went to the service…
    and one die…
    the other killed himself….
    Then it was just mother and her…..
    Struggling on hard times….
    She thought life had passed her by
    Didn’t know if the next day would even be better..
    Her mother married again…but it was her worse dream..
    See this man her mother married didn't like kids…
    So she was always in her room…
    Wasn’t allowed to roam the house…
    But he pay the bills….keep food on the table…
    For the most part he made her mother happy….
    Then he went away…never to return…..
    It was a blessing...that is until they found him shot 6 times close
    range in the chest…and there he lay…..
    her uncles were called…her father's brothers...
    mother turn ta them…
    at this time her daughter was about 4 goin on 5…..her mother ran the numbers
    from the house….cops would raid…she place her daughter
    in the truck of the car….all in keeping her….
    She went though a lot to get the daughter she never had..
    All boys…oh man….she was the baby of the bunch..
    Mother ran a night club…a stripe club that’s is…..the stripers use to stay at the house..
    Always loud but always took care of the bosses daughter…
    Wow..what a house…all the kids in the hood
    Use to come to play…but she never was allowed out of the yard…
    For the things her family did and the things that went on…
    She had to stay close….time passed on...
    At this time she was 10 goin on 11 and was told more of the family ways..
    But not about being adopted…just history of the family she knew as family…
    Now she got good grades…never caused problems..
    Stay to herself most of the time….she wrote a lot and no one knew…it was her inner thoughts
    It was her release for not being able
    To go to little parties
    Or even have a friend to stay the night…her little brick wall she use to call it…
    No one looks in and she couldn’t look out….
    The fall of her 9th grade year…high school she thought almost free….always body guards…a black kid with white guards...(dig dat)..in a all white school
    she played on the girls basketball team..didn’t worry about track
    She couldn’t take the guards…so she closed her world once more……
    Actin if it don’t hurt when it do…..

    Stay tune for pt 2…hope you guys like pt1
     
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    love it, i am in suspence. yes i would love to read part -2
     
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    great beginning
    can't wait for part 2

    Shay
     
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    i can't wait for pt 2...part 1 is very tight
     
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    thanks...glad ya like..workin on part 2..much love thanks for the support...
     
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    wow !! i really enjoyed it .....mo ! mo ! mo !
    pt.II please bring it on don't make me wait ....
    tyte story sistah
     
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    thanks rich....its comin calm down....much love
     
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    DON'T KEEP US SUSPENDED... BRING ON PT.2
     
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