Black Poetry : Close your eyes Mama

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  1. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Close your eyes Mama and don't let them see
    what daddys best friend has been doin' to me
    we won't tell daddy, cause he'll just get mad
    he'll deny the whole thing, just say that I'm bad

    So I'm gonna go Mama, I can't stay here no more
    then you won't have to face what happens, behind closed doors
    you won't have to admit, that you knew all along
    about what he was doing and why it was so wrong

    You just closed your eyes Mama, to my muffled screams
    and ignored the reality of my torturous dreams
    to my safely locked door, you gave him the key
    and the freedom to do, what he wanted with me

    So close your eyes tight Mama, close your ears and your heart
    and just pretend that my world hasn't been torn apart
    by a man who hurts and degrades me, with every touch
    tell me the truth Mama, do you hate me that much

    Don't start to cry Mama, all your tears are in vain
    if you'd really loved me, you'd have stopped all the pain
    you keep tellin' me Mama, that I shouldn't blame you
    that it wasn't your fault, you didn't know what to do

    Well Mama I'm sorry, but thats just not good enough
    you're the one that I loved and thought I could trust
    but it's ok Mama, I'll do it for you, I've made my decision
    and when you read this you'll know, your son died for a reason


    (c) nfn 2001
     
  2. Hunter

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    You spelled harsh reality with every stroke poetess and for this I applaud you...for taking the ugly in this world..and creating...sheer poetic beauty

    In my humble opinion..this was excellence!!

    *eyes*
     
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    Kitana....

    What a profound poem...

    Epiphany :heart:
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kitana,

    While reading this it felt as if something was squeezing my heart. I felt the pain and suffering in this piece. TOO REAL!

    Madd Sistahly Love :heart:
    CCBSKYN
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sadly sad write

    my heart died after the first few lines
    my soul start crying u pose a hurt and heart
    felt piece here....:(
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoooo!

    Reading this made me think. I wrote a piece about this on my colum page and I got so many responses on the page and privately--you have given us a piece of yourself here and it is powerful and well done--deeply affecting--Amun-Ra


    Check out my new column “Dangerous Psychology When We Cheat!” at “http://www.destee.com/forums/showthread.php?threadid=4987
     
  7. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hunter..your words mean a lot to me...and if showing the ugly can make one person think about it...then I am grateful for that...I know a lot of people don't like to deal with the ugly...but...it's out there...thanks again...

    Epip...thanks for feeling the depth of the message I sent...

    Coco....thank you...you pay me a huge compliment when you say that, because it means the message is being delivered...

    Rich..thank you for feelin it..it's sad but true...

    Ra...thank you...for taking the time to "see" my words...maybe folks don't like the topic of conversation, but it does get them talking...and thats a start...

    K
     
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    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    Kitana ...

    you are blessed and blessing ... richly

    thank you for this
     
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