Black Poetry : claustrophobia suicide

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the walls closed in on me....
    i looked at my feet,
    purple veins branched
    through them and disappears.....

    a tear excaped
    the edges of my eye
    my vertabre was crooked
    fear made it that way....

    steel twisted around my ankles
    bounding me in insecurity...
    cuting of my circulation

    my heart beats slower...
    scratch marks dig deep
    into the walls....

    HATE penetrates my soul
    as i look at your picture
    shattered on the ground....

    my thoughts swirl around
    my brain making me dizzy...
    i thought about the cold
    lips that kissed me and
    is now on someone else......

    i wanted to sink into the earth and disappear....
    i was dead to the world....

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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt your words describing the smothering feeling of being choked with pain. Very well written poet.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks, my friend, when i write i try to get my audience to feel me....i want them to understand how i feel...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt sis u drop it to be felt
    express it all
     
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    this was tight
    well felt....
    flow on
    my lil sis
     
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    This is just 2 real
    Very true and tyte.
     
  7. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall glad yall feelin me....
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    oh.....this was most definitely the deepest thing I've read in a long time.....two kool-aid packs.
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwww...man, do u know how long its been since i've had some kool-aid, lol, thamks for that ima start brewin it now...lol...thanks for the love sistah, i appreciate it.

    :heart:
    -story
     
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    awe man...

    Very deep and hearft felt story......love the Expression
     
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