Black Poetry : CiRcLiNg RaYs Of HoPe

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i push,
    and back away,
    i leave,
    but i wanna stay.
    my wording may sound crazy,
    and contradict themselves.

    but the point waiting to be made,
    will eventually be telled.
    not told--don't try to fix it,
    or assume ti something different.
    just sit there quietly,
    open your ears--close your mouth and listen.
    no bluntness is meant,
    but if it is----------it's just blunt.
    which means the point is clearly stated,
    meaning there's for it-no need to hunt.
    now i may circle what i just said,
    a hundred times.
    tip toeing around my feelings,
    cutting off my life lines.
    but only because there's this person now,
    that thinks-my thoughts.
    knows my ums and laughs,
    knows my would haves and would have nots.
    and now i circle everything,
    the yes--or--and no.
    because if i'm lying,
    they're gonna tell me---so.....
    bitting my tongue,
    is never needed.
    digressing is in order,
    if silence has proceeded.
    but before i go any further,
    let me state i don't know if it's love.
    because when i think of that,
    i'm never quite sure who or what to think of.
    well who?,
    maybe.
    my ray of hope,
    that's what i call my baby.
    and they make me feel so special,
    so far from what i think of myself.
    and never say, "You put me in mind of,
    so and so," or somebody else.
    my ray of hope,
    makes my dreams come to being.
    and makes me open up my eyes,
    to show me why life is worth seeing.
    humph----i'm stuck on them,
    like chuck.
    but that's how i be feeling,
    and i know simple words ain't enough.
    but they only don't seem enough,
    to the people that don't hold my hand.
    and frankly i don't give a flying carpet,
    just as long as my ray of hope understands.
    because with them,
    unfinished is complete.
    and the back holds,
    the front seat.
    contradictory ain't it-----so,
    that's okay!
    because i analyze your facial expressions,
    anyways.
    i just can't stress enought,
    how many doughnuts i've made.
    burnt--not literally-------rubbers,
    cast out so many people well behaved.
    but not this time,
    i'm not going out on thrice.
    and i'm not gonna make,
    the same mistake twice.
    so just sit there quietly,
    open your ears--close your mouth--and listen.
    the point has already been made,
    you're my ray of hope--in me--you make all the difference.
    not sometimes,
    always---always to the end.
    so when i leave,
    know that i'll stay............shoot----------i'm circling again........ :hearts1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ray of hope the guiding light
    set the tone i'm listening right
    i feel ya motion and taste the
    emotions as it flow to the great
    sweet hope when u gone u still
    near so noone needs to fear
    this was so tyte and to the core i want more and more !!!

    flow poet of the week it's yo shine to blaze in do yo thang lilcherry!
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nicely done sister...

    "Our Poet of the Week"...

    I'm circling with you sister...
    on those rays you painted
    so perfectly....

    *Snaps*
    Sage
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was tight, all the way down from the title to the end. That circling, that cycle of thoughts were felt in this entire piece. I feel you on this sis, this was masterful.
     
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    upping dis one it was full of hope !
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ah yes..

    Quote:
    "my ray of hope,
    that's what i call my baby.
    and they make me feel so special,"


    this is just so sweet
    digging this drop :)

    Blue:heart:
     
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    tyte scribe sis...
    i see no contradiction here....

    one love
    khasm
     
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    my girl's name should be krispy kreme
    all the doughnuts l spin around her

    dat's dat 8ball in the hole baby!! :pool:
     
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    That was sweeter than the doughnuts themselves. But you know, I loved it. Beautifully written wuth no selfishness, just full of love!!!
     
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    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Good..!

    This just came straight from your heart to mine. Ill be meditating on your word for a while, this piece was so full of substance and as someelse stated, "LOVE"...this is one of those poems i like to read over and over...Keep Em Comin...1 :luvv: :luvv: :luvv: :luvv:
     
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