Black Poetry : Circle Of Intensity

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  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To convey these thoughts can seem like forever
    Since I’ve been able to be familiar with
    This
    Sealed it with a kiss
    Forbidden beliefs
    Unable to grasp
    This
    Entirely
    My pen has run’ith over
    And my brain can’t visualize another being
    Such as you.
    Can’t quite understand why you insist on tracing my thoughts
    With yours
    Ending up in a circle of
    Intensity
    Visualize these poetic expressions
    Your mind is heavenly
    In need of a cool breeze
    Finalized with drips of devotion
    Run away, I’ve tried
    Come back to
    This
    Don’t want
    This
    But I need
    This
    Addicted to the mind
    And how it seduces mine
    Accusations run wild continuously
    In hope of it not being true
    Walls fall down slowly
    I am me
    I am I
    I am…
    Inevitably yours, Jackie
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed the creativity of this spiral within a spiral.
     
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    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was well written....i really enjoyed reading it.....
     
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    smoothsoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow! This piece flowed like water.
     
  5. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the love peeps :) i really appreciate it
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    you created a circle so smooth love how it flowed outward
    tyte poetic joint
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This definitely has a great tone to it. It sounds very serious and sincere. I think the ending say alot. "Inevitably yours" makes me think of a chain of dominoes that start collapsing and I'm picturing that you're the last dominoe in the chain when all the chips have fallen that will be still standing by his side. Great Ending & Piece All Around!
     
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    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I must agree with everyone, the flow in this piece is nice. It was a very enjoyable read

    Thanks 4 sharing
     
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