Black Poetry : Cincinnati Air

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hypersleep, Apr 13, 2001.

  1. hypersleep

    hypersleep Member MEMBER

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    These tufts of air
    talked to me
    as I fell
    speaking in gunshot mumbles

    The vibrations in the slow
    breeze of death wove a distant serenade
    and whined a woodwind's song.

    The air met my blood
    danced into red before my eyes
    could see
    their last horrifying visions.

    The air puffed hurrying
    from my lungs leaving
    the scene like a
    parent
    transparent
    rushing away from a dying house,
    child in hand.

    The air around my mother
    slowed
    it's spinning and
    conducted a cord of my
    dying electricity into her first tears.

    The city cries broken glass now
    and weeps fire and wails smoke and
    the air coughs
    the thick black
    of my skin.






    martin smith
    © 2001


    http://www.time.com/time/nation/article/0,8599,106087,00.html
     
  2. Heartbeat

    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Since November, the tears of four mothers flow
    as the Ohio River turns red. Thank you for this.

    BE
     
  3. Hunter

    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "...the city cries broken glass now..."

    What a powerful picture

    Walk on air poet...
    Then tell us what you see

    Very vivid piece!

    *stained-glass*
     
  4. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sin sinnati

    yo i know it has to be ill right now.
    i told sherykah how i felt about it.
    the city does cry broken glass and the air coughs black smoke
    America chokes.

    peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    SO SAD SO TRUE REMINDS ME OF THE MASS IN CHICAGO
    THE BEAT DOWN ON CITY STREET IN THE BLACK NIGHT
    OF SMOKED FILLED AIR AND THE CRIES OF BROKEN
    BLUE GLASS.......****! I FEEL YA
     
  6. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!,Wow!,Wow!

    Good personification skills hypersleep and I love your screen name for some reason. It's something about that name I like! Lol! Keep scribin! Your work is off the hinges!
    Desert Storm
     
  7. StarGoddess

    StarGoddess Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I AM IN AWE OF YOU!!

    u are so amazing....

    wounded to the quick
    with the vitality and wit of your words....

    shake me down
    shake me down
    shake
    me
    down.


    *smiling at you*
     
  8. hypersleep

    hypersleep Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall

    thanks for all the love,
    especially you sgs...

    i've been sick the last couple of days,
    and I forgot i had even posted...

    thanks for all the love !
     
  9. honeyluv

    honeyluv Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    in tears ! but u get well soon hea!
     
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