Black Poetry : chocolate & champagne

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LadySag, Oct 16, 2003.

  1. LadySag

    LadySag Member MEMBER

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    I woke up alone in love
    from a night of chocolate & champagne
    red roses and warm rain

    last night must have been a fairy tale
    a love tragedy known too well
    about how all good things come to an end
    how friends can be lovers but lovers can't be friends
    we've always been just friends nothing more nothing less
    but I guess last night we decided to put our friendship to the test
    cause this morning I awoke undress
    with my head across your bare chest
    not wanting to wake you I just laid there and thought
    where do we go from here? will it mess up what we got?
    I pray not... cuz I don't want to lose what we have
    I like the way we hang out, chill with friends and all laugh
    I slowly removed myself from laying next to you
    Maybe we just laid there naked? maybe I didn't have sex with you?
    But what if I did? let me look for a condom... I'm not ready for a kid.
    What have I done? hopefully nothing too dumb. I'm young.and I'm not sure he's the one.
    maybe if i get dressed and clean up he won't remember last night
    I can pretend nothing happened and I'm alright
    I won't say anything about it till he does

    I woke up alone in love
    from a night of chocolate & champagne
    red roses and warm rain

    - hey Sag I want to talk about last...
    - shh you don't have to explain....
    - do you know you were out in the rain?
    - yeah I seen our clothes hanging up in bathroom over the shower
    - yeah when I got to you you said you asked me stand with you if just for an hour
    - I don't understand
    - sit down take my hand
    - no I think I'll stand
    - you called me and told me you broke up with your man
    -and...
    -and when I got to you you were crying in the rain
    you could barely stand up... you must have been drunk from the champagne. after you called I brought you chocolate and red roses to try to ease the pain. you asked me to let you cry for a moment in the pouring rain.
    - so why did I wake up naked?
    - I tried to give you dry clothes but you simply wouldn't take it
    -why were you in the bed with me?
    - because you asked me to be you were looking for comfort and sympathy
    - so that's it right?
    - that how we ended the night.



    :)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    friendship n' love
    love n' friendship
    sound like a true friend to me !
    this was warm and catching to da eye nice scribe lovin ya pen
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ahhhh...this was tight...
    friendship and love
    wooooooweeee
    like what ya posed
     
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    JAD68 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice piece...

    True friends share true love... unconditionally.
    Mentally stimulating, thanks for that flow.
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwww!

    This is so sweet and so mysterious also, cause you really never say what happened! YUP! I am nosey! I am the village NANA! WELCOME TO THE PLAYGROUND! This was off the chain.
    Blessings ON YOur HOuse!
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love the script... becoming of a second part...

    nfinite..
    jh
     
  7. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW.......

    I'm not even sure I can gather the words to describe how
    much I enjoyed this piece...it had such emotion, imagery...
    and an interesting twist to the ending...I mean this piece was
    wonderfully and creatively written...
    thought provoking as well...

    Phenomenal...I must say...........I loved it, I'll def' look for more
    of your work!
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the imagery in this piece was just beautiful...and the dialogue between the two friends was off the hook..much love for this!
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes LadySag

    This was off the hook.. Welcome to Destee

    Keep posting these bombs.
     
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    This was a MASTERPIECE! :toast:


    Now, that romantic heart of mine would want to see you 2 together.

    But, everything is not meant to be and some things are best left as they are....."If it don't fit, don't force it...."


    But, this was a GREAT piece....and the ending was a wonderful twist!





    And :birthday:
     
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