Quiet Poetry Lounge : Chocolate Breezes

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alter, Sep 19, 2003.

  1. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i dream of chocolate breezes
    as love freezes

    please don't go!

    the world needs us
    jesus
    help me to get you
    off my mind

    i used to feel fine
    but now every crime i see
    on tv
    reminds me of the time
    we slept till nine
    me findin every excuse
    to make you mine

    i told you that i'd be yours forever
    your world or whatever

    yeah...

    i thought i was clever
    makin up pretty lines

    my grand design
    was set
    my goal was met
    with my bois i had bet
    a few dollas
    that i'd make you holla
    that you'd be callin my name
    and cementin my fame
    in the hall of playas
    yeah i thought you was

    enjoyin my flava.

    but look at me now
    waitin on you with a frown
    wonderin when you gon' call
    cause in love with you i did fall
    to my great detriment
    my heart's encased by cement
    while my love does ferment
    though your grace i have spent

    your lips of mahogany
    soft as felt

    against your skin
    i did melt

    inside of you i was lost
    to and fro i was tossed
    while in the heavens
    stars did cross

    while your eyes invoked night skies...

    the love we made
    rocked the world
    i felt it move as we both grooved
    that ancient rhythm
    primeval dance
    that left me comatose
    and in a trance

    deep dark mahogany lovin
    troublin my sleep
    my dreams now creep
    through astral haunts
    morose and lonely

    why don't you phone me?

    chocolate breezes drift through
    naked branches
    sift through memories
    while summer flees
    the wind whispers secrets about the fall
    as i sit and wait upon your call

    shivering i stand and walk away
    my tears of shame
    can mark the day of my awakening to
    eternal truth

    that love once lost is past reproof.
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love the way you broke this down. Peace to you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte chocolate flow
    u took it there and back
    this was well done like da flava
    mo! mo ! mo !
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this ya broke it down...
    nice very nice flow
     
  5. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank y'all... :)
     
  6. Ayaatee

    Ayaatee Active Member MEMBER

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    Very nice!!
     
  7. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The beauty in the details...

    You are gifted,gifted,gifted! And the beauty was in the detail. I can tell you work with passion and purpose...I see great things coming from you in your work...Keep scribing! And vibing that Quiet Peaceful flow!

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
  8. alter

    alter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx for the read, ayatee n miss luscious...i don't drop through here much, but i appreciate the love that my work gets when i do...take care y'all, keep poetin' on! LOL :spinn:
     
  9. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh my...
    ok now alter can u answer me somethin...
    how long are we gon have to wait for another alter original??
    I love the lesson in this scribe...hopefully your truth will shine on someone who needs it :)
     
  10. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    Definately feeling this.
    Nice Scribe!
     
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