Khasm13 : chinese water torture....part 1

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  1. Khasm13

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    uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...


    i wake up groggy and senseless...
    um...where am i?
    my hands and feet are shackled leaving me defenseless
    laying naked in a dark drafty room...
    silence consumes...wtf happened to me...how could i have missed this


    the right side of my head hurts and feels like i've been beat double fisted
    with my mouth dry and my lips being swollen, chapped and blistered
    i...hope that this is only a dream...but this grim reality persisted
    the taste of blood is bitter on my tongue
    this place where i lay is damp and smells of rotted flesh from bones thas hung
    my breath weezes cause i bleed internally from a punctured lung
    where did my oppressors snatch me up from?


    all i can remember is being in da laundry mat
    then 24/7 piece late at night cause during da day i slacked
    i was the only one washing clothes that night
    then i recalled two men dressed in black walking towards me from da back
    as i folded up my comforter set and placed them in a neat stack
    they walked pass me...unshaven and grissly not looking at me
    so i gazed away....then whack!!!!!!!
    intense pain...a flash of white light then fade to black....

    my body lays on this metallic table crumpled and with extreme woe i'm racked
    what do they want from me...what deed of mine caused this dastardly act
    just then... a cold callous voice broke the silence

    "mr. buchanan....after your numerous warnings...why do still defy us?
    you put me in an awkard postion cause we've neva had to do this to writers"

    a dark figure came in...with goggles that gave them night vision
    and then...they gaged my mouth with a small towel which strapped down to the table at the head end...

    "too bad you did not heed my previous words to the wise
    now you will die a horrible death...was stupidity worth your demise?"

    i think to myself...wtf is he refering to
    my mind is racing...how can i get out of this...what can i do?
    cause still...i don't know what they are going to do
    then i heard the ceiling above me move...


    water came down in drops on the towel gaged in my mouth with a plop
    each drop making the towel more wet...with my head restrained...i could not move away from da dot...
    my breathing is becoming increasingly difficult...making my labored lungs burn hot...
    why are they doing this to me...f_k...i'd rather get shot....


    conclusion coming later this week...​
     
  2. AHMOSE

    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As I begin to visualize this piece I find myself in the postion of the captured.

    Nice piece! Im waiting to see how the rest unfolds.
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

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    :bingo: you grabbed....thought i was in a movie set this was one of them mind followers i likes this can't wait for the rest
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All that gruesome detail leaves the reader clinging to the edge of their seats wanting to know....what's next? But you know what Khasm? I'm thinking this may have something to do with some folks withholding something....hmmm....okay then, I'll stay tuned....
     
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    man -o-man captivity in the sour drama can dem
    the last life what u did here was took me in deep
    now i want more more moreeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!
    give me more of dis torture whewwwwwwwwwwwwww!
     
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    QQ smh no you did NOT jes leave it like that lololol

    had the captivating text to support detailed tale

    and then-

    you jes stop?????

    smh SISTER QUEENTSWANA! MAY I HOLD YA HAMMA AGAIN PLEASE!

    :read: QQ

    lol in all seriousness brotha this was a gripping piece but

    its rude to make a lady wait QQ

    so HURRY UP! lol ummm please QQ :D
     
  7. queentswana

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    Now Trin,
    you already know we out number men 12-1 ...and I kinda think...umm we need to keep him around...
    well ...*ya never know* hahahaaaaa
     
  8. Khasm13

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    thanks fam....


    btw...i'll catch no hammers...so save it for the walnuts or something....lol

    one love
    khasm
     
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    Just as nice.. I read part two first. Part one left the reader in peril and part two carried it to conclusion well. Great follow up part two.
     
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