Khasm13 : chinese water torture....con-clue-zon

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  1. Khasm13

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    drip by agonizing drip
    the towel stuffed in my mouth swells...expanding
    pulling apart my quivering lips
    the tips of my fingers are bloody from
    tearing at the rope grips as i choke on water sips
    i now know why they want me dead
    cause i write about ish black folks need to have in their head
    instead of what the media and the rich have spoon fed
    to us…blinding us from true justice….thus
    leading us to the valley of broken dreams that have turned to rust
    barren and desolate my soul now feels
    cause i’m strapped down tightly from my wrists down to my ankles and heels
    in my head the wheels turn, trying to get my @ss out of this steel slow burn
    this gruesome episode will leave me on ice…chilled…a fate i did not earn
    for writing down truths of the world…i now lay helpless…with invisible faces staring at me…stern
    the minutes pass like hours…i breathe in water on each breath…making my injured lungs sour
    my body is broken…and even if it wasn’t…i still would not have the power
    to escape this jail after punishing my evil captors while they cower
    my eyes are getting heavy…as water fills my insides like the drain in a shower
    i'm so sleepy...my eyes finally close....
    leaving me to explore like eddie bauer....



    i wake up in the hospital 2 weeks later
    the first thing i see is the nurse…then some flowers

    later i read the note on the flowers….
    and it said….continue with your work…while i live
    evil will topple like the twin towers....

    signed
    soul eternal​
     
  2. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Nice Khasm13
    Did I miss the beginning of this tale chinese water torture. Bring the link and attach it here, so the entire story can be read.
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now you can't leave us hanging without part three.. who freed you?

    " later i read the note on the flowers….
    and it said….continue with your work… "

    Who left the note? :peace:
     
  4. PositiveMindset

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    I agree with Bro. Hodee, I need 2 know cuz I wanna thank the cat 4 bringin' U back.

    Brother, your mental is so [email protected] vast.

    Do your thang.
     
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    Outstanding piece it left me as a reader on the seat of my pants not knowing what to expect next. Thrilling conclusion to a great piece of poetry. Thanks for sharing and allowing us to be woowed. :terrific:

    :spinstar:Soulja:spinstar:
     
  6. Khasm13

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    gifted ghetto supa hero...soul eternal brought him back
    after he let them cats catch da baseball bat...

    i'll write another episode from that series to explain the gory details...:wink:

    one love
    khasm
     
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    The powers that be could torture your body, but not your soul, eternal. Your words bring this story to life from the canvas Khasm. Enjoyed the read.
     
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    Interesting write...
    As I read I kept thinking
    about the price of knowledge
    the price of an awakening
    the price of possessing the truth
    and having the courage to
    share it...
    is a long and lonely road

    Great imagery, it was like a
    passage out of a great story!

    1lovealways
    Sage
     
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    You make a great storyteller brotha :read:

    Jes not one for da chiren LOL

    *sendin em all to bed b4 uncle Khasm come in to give em a nightmare smh*

    lolol was waitin for this con-clue-zon and it was worth da wait :read:
     
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    This joint was Phatter than bonitta's applebum my brother much respect for the talent and creativity! :idea:
     
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