Black Poetry : Chill

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Lynne', Jan 13, 2005.

  1. Lynne'

    Lynne' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Chill

    You said I should come over so we can chill
    Unsure of the definition of that word still
    Cause I thought when we talked I had made it clear
    Of the one direction you were not to steer
    But you went there anyway
    And pretending not to hear me when I'd say
    No! Get off me! Stop playing. Leave me alone.
    Though I pleaded it was like you were lost in a zone
    Though we struggled, you managed to make your way inside
    I couldn't break from your grasp so I layed there and cried
    My spirit broken inside
    You had taken away something special to me
    I was waiting for LOVE to lose my virginity
    And without a single word you just got up and left
    Ever since that day I've been mildly depressed
    And now I can never looked at a guy the same
    My view has been tainted and you are to blame
    Or maybe I am cause I should have known better
    But regardless I'm lost in this stormy *** weather
    If a guy asks me my name, I hesitate, not sure
    It's so hard to tell if his intentions are pure
    Especially if he says we should go out and chill
    Unsure of the definition of that word....still.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    mad tyte flow and the feeling flow
    sometime we all to let one know
    to chill coz this no thrill ride
    flow head on poet
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Lynne'
    Here's a warm welcome..comming at ya, relax and enjoy the stay.
    I am so hoping that this is a "made up" poem that you just put together. A wonderful piece I might add. thanks for spilling.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is beautifully thrown down, but so heartbreaking. Like queen said, welcome once again to Destee.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The way you posed this, was so heartbreaking, I could feel the pain. Like queent I'm hoping this was a poetic creation from your mind, this was very well done poet!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** this was tight..flow and release this was off it had me caught up in it...nice lay
     
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    This was definitely hittin'.

    Makes me wanna grab cats by the temples & scream at 'em, "CHILL!!!!"

    So sad....So nice.
     
  8. Lynne'

    Lynne' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's actually an exaggerated version of the truth.
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    look I'm in the early morning fog scorning a catalog I'M not fat at all// trying to order workwear got an alert stare// on page twenty two got plenty to do// before I mail order this
     
  10. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was a heartfelt piece...
     
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