Black Poetry : childhood burduns

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Jul 13, 2003.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    mama why u hit me?
    what did i do?
    did i make u angry?


    mama why u cryin?
    whats hurting u so?
    why are packing up and
    living out the door?

    mama whats that
    that daddies drinking?
    mama i've been thinkin
    about that strange man
    that came in with u

    last night?
    who is he?
    i heard daddy yellin
    from the kitchen,
    were u having
    another fight?


    mama i dont know
    much about this,
    but i know
    this aint right!
    :maddd:




    dis is from ya venting, poetic GODDESS,i hope u enjoy the scribe. ;)
     
  2. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi,

    This is a very deep piece!! I am feeling your flow!! Great work!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    once again u bless us wit the grace of ya pen
     
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    nice! nice! Tyte piece! I could actually hear a childs voice reciting these words!
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanxs fam just doin my thang
     
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