Quiet Poetry Lounge : Child Cry

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Bluewater, Nov 28, 2003.

  1. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so why did the child cry
    with the weak eyes
    as she looked toward the sky

    why is her shoulder slope
    walking slow
    feeling low

    what have happen
    to take the life from her eyes
    as she cry looking at the sky

    where are the defender
    the strong ones
    to protect her from
    those who will harm her

    are they high as the sky
    blind to what is
    before there eyes
    as she cry

    the child is slowly dying
    they are blind
    to this reality
    as she no longer cry
    where is the child
     
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    peon

    this peom had a nice flow and i relly liked the peom it was alsome and i love the peom cant not wait to here more of you peom ok
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So many answers as to why, none of them acceptable. Very touching.
     
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    posed very well SisBlue..
    a childs cry going unheard for the world to busy
    worring about itself..
    going that fast pace...missing out on the young...
    i really like this and i feel ya on dis..flow on...
    you lay them down and hit the point on every stroke.... :angel1:
     
  5. Bluewater

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    thank you
    darkdaimonboy8
    watinzname
    angle
    for feeling my flow much love and many blessing to you
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this lay deep within and i wonder my self ...
    tyte mind openner
     
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    I worry so about the children too, Bluewater. This hit home, and you posed it so beautifully. Peace
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes my brother rich and sister gempis we got to keep a watchful eye much love to you:heart:
    Peace
     
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    This was a story that so many children don't tell.

    Noone around to hear the sobs of the little ones.

    If they are around, they're not close.

    Nice piece.
     
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    I was really feeling this one.
     
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